The first thing I'll say is that it's relatively difficult to read due to the formatting. When you're breaking for a new line, you should probably hit the return key twice, just so that it gives you a space between the lines. A lot of people I know won't read something if it's formatted like this, just because it's like being faced with a wall of text to read.
I quite like your story idea. It's been done a few times, but I think you've got a really good way of writing that makes it quite unique to read. And I've only ever read where the girl has two choices, so three choices is quite an interesting twist as well. I wish I had three guys after me. I'd be lucky to have one, haha! But yeah, I think your story is quite good. Just give it a comb-over with a spellcheck/grammar check and you should have a really good story here. Well done! :)
The first thing I'll say is that it's relatively difficult to read due to the formatting. When you're breaking for a new line, you should probably hit the return key twice, just so that it gives you a space between the lines. A lot of people I know won't read something if it's formatted like this, just because it's like being faced with a wall of text to read.
I quite like your story idea. It's been done a few times, but I think you've got a really good way of writing that makes it quite unique to read. And I've only ever read where the girl has two choices, so three choices is quite an interesting twist as well. I wish I had three guys after me. I'd be lucky to have one, haha! But yeah, I think your story is quite good. Just give it a comb-over with a spellcheck/grammar check and you should have a really good story here. Well done! :)