Un Jour Dans La Vie - Comments

I like the portrayal of your protagonist, he's certainly interesting. Your narration is great; it's really easy to get the real of the era it's set in.
There are a number of gramatical mistakes though; you sometimes miss puctuation from the end of speech, and the first half of chapter one is in present tense while the rest of the story is in past tense. You also occasionally forget to captalise letters at beginnings of sentences.
Other than that, the plot and characters seem interesting, and the layout is really nice.

"In: English to French [Edit categories]. Answer: le jour is a masculine noun." There you go, it's Un Jour. sorry for being such a Grammar nazi, just tryin' to help here ^^'

Comment Swapperino!
I'm not 100% sure here, but I think it's Un Jour and not Une, since I think Jour is a male noun in French. But then again, I'm not completely sure.
Anyways, it's the first time I come across a story written by a male author on mibba. I quite enjoyed it, to be honest. It's an interesting concept and your writing is very good, flows well and your choice of words isn't too formal but not too sloppy either. I like this so far, I haven't read all the chapters but I'll be back to check on the rest. Good job!
Oh and yay first comment :D