Diaries of a teenage Vampire - Comments

sorry...i clicked it too many times...ah well at least now u have 3 extra comments

you should update soon because this is very good

you should update soon because this is very good

you should update soon because this is very good

This story sounds like it might have some potential. I think you need to add more detail, there's a lot of she said, she said, in ch2 when you were describing the schedule, the AKA was amusing only once and then it got quite repetitive. Then there are quite a lot of spelling errors, which makes it hard to read, and some grammar errors, I think you should try going through a spelling/grammar check on your computer before posting. You don't have enough for me to tell whether this is just another vampire story or not, but the prologue sounds like kind of cliché and you admitted yourself that the title does not match the story, so I would suggest changing it when you get a better idea.

Nice.
*waits for more*

i like it, but i wanna know...is the spelling meant to be written like that?

anyhow...i like it

I like it! Its good!

its really imaginative, it has a lot of potential. I like it

Nice imagery, I feel like I am there.

i think you need spell check and you have a lot of mistakes in there like grope instead of group and close instead of clothes.

It's okay, other than the fact that your grammar habits suck.
No offense, but I couldn't understand most of that.
I think I got it okay, though.
I'll keep reading, it sounds like a pretty cool story.

What's going to happen, this is good.
more soon?

its a really good start, really wanna know more.
continue with it...please

Nicce. I want more..