Maybe Someday. - Comments

^_^ I've only started reading the prologue, but so far, it's interesting. I really think I will subscribe to this. You have a great way of making someone get interested in the stories. You have great grammar and spelling. The story seems fairly awesome so far.

:) Keep up the good work!

I am in love with your layout. Its soft colored and sweet, it also helps me see that this story will end up have romance in it :)

The character Claire really cought my attention. She was bright, happy, and had attitude. I likes that about her and it allowed me to connect with the story. The same for the main character, i felt like i could connect with her :) Another thing i noticed that i loved was he fact that i couldn't find any spelling mistakes! :) That was amazing to me considering i suck at spelling. Haha.

I love the story, keep up the great work :)

The layout is very bright and beautiful. I'm sure it fits the story very well.

I must admit though, I dislike stories that are about a person telling the tale of their relationship; I just find them rather tedious and lets be honest, you never remember ever word said, every motion made and every feeling felt. Maybe it's just me but it just doesn't drag me into a story at all.

You do however have a very skilled way with words and your spelling and grammar is incredible. Really incredible. You shouldn't give up on this story one bit.

Layout/Summary: Very pretty layout, quite lovely. The summary sounds pretty interesting, though I admit this isn't my type of story. However, the use of the quote is very good and it sets the mood for the story.

Prologue: Great introduction to the story, really. The reader gets a good insight and a vague look at why they are this way. It was a good prologue. No mistakes that I noticed. I also found myself smiling at Allie and Claire's interactions. True best friends, lol.

Chapter One: Aww, Dan seems really nice and cute. I've never been to camp before but I can see why Allie would feel out of place and alone with all the people. And it was great for Dan to reach out to her. Good chapter.

Chapter Two: AWWWW, I am a huge fan of mother-daughter bonding chapters because I don't see that all that often and it was written so expertly. It was really great.

Overall, you have a nice story, but my reading stops here (sorry, just not all that into because this isn't my genre of preferred reading) and trust me, it's not because I don't like it. I never read these types of stories, so forgive. However, with that said, I think you have a good plot and a strong sense of writing. You're terrific and this is off to quite the start. Keep up the good work, okay? :)

I'm from the comment swap and I read the whole story :-)
It's so good! I love it so much. The layout is amazing. It's so bright and pretty. I love how you did flash backs, and I love how you didn't make this like... a perfect relationship. No relationship is perfect, and I'm actually really happy that this is much more dramatic then a cliche romance story. (: I can't wait to read more! Keep up the good work!

From comment swap here! First off, as you've probably heard a dozen times before, this is a really nice layout although it's bright and cheerful is sort of dissonant with the actual content of the story. Not that it's a bad thing, but it was a little surprising as I was expecting a fluffy romance and instead am getting a dramatic relationship exploration.

I like the writing in the present tense. It can be hard to pull off, but you really have a knack for it. Although I do find it a little odd that you keep the present tense even when you're doing flashback chapters. I thought it would be a simple delineation between the two, but that's just my personal opinion.

First chapter is a great starting off point. I'm not sure what's going on exactly between the two characters, so I'm interested to learn more about it.

The second chapter really captures the feeling of being in a new situation, surrounded by new people. The small details really make the scene like the fact Dan's face is red from running and the sun and that Allie feels cheered by the fact that he knows her name.

This is a really good beginning to a story, and it'll be interesting to see where you take it.

First of all, I adore the layout! A pretty pink and the line breaker in the summary is adorable. :) Second of all, I've read a lot of past tense stories, but present tense stories are rare and rarely aren't done correctly so I applaud you for doing so!

I hope Allie is fleshed out more as a character. So far I see hints of her own personality, but I hope she comes out more to show how different she is as a person. Allie seems pretty spunky, but hung up on this guy who doesn't seem to treat her right. I also adore her roommate and her spunky attitude, too, haha.

There are only a few grammatical errors, but those can be easily fixed just by reading through the chapters again. I hope to read more about this!

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I LOVE YOUR STORY. For once I stumble upon a story that isn't about One Direction or MCR. It has a great plot and hooked me from the get go. You have a great writing style and a knack for detail. I really enjoy it. The layout is also really pretty! <3 Really great job, keep it up! I will definitely keep reading!

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So the swap feature brought me here, and I have to say I'm pleasantly surprised to find a story like this. You don't typically find stories about friendship on Mibba. If it's a boy and a girl, there's just gotta be unrequited love or secret love or something of that nature, and it's refreshing to have something so real in a story. I've had friends I was really close to and then grew apart from, so I can relate to this. Plus I didn't see any errors, so I have to say all-around great job. (:

So, the layout kind of went BAM! Took me by surprise haha. Onto the prologue. Totally caught onto the Willy Wonka quote. I do have to say that I don't like the constant breaks in your paragraphs. Detail is a writer's best friend.

Ben is a butt :(

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So, I loved the vibrant layout even though, so far, this isn't vibrant. It provides a hope and I like that! I like the story so far. I love the whole, destructive teenager thing -- ugh that's my kinda story. And yours has just made it on my subs and recs list! I love this, and I really like Allie so far. She's ... she's got her own mind and she thinks for herself -- people don't really influence her and her decisions, she does it all like the big girl she is. That's comforting. KEEP GOING! WOO! Carry on, my fellow writer. ^^

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I kind of adore the layout.

First of all, I love how it's spaced out, easy to read and follow.

I really like the first sentence, it draws the reader in very well and I love the descriptions. I like how you go straight on to how she's feeling because life does mimic things that way and how they both weave in together very well.

The dialogue seems very steady and life-like, which is good. Some of the grammar is a little wonky, but all in all, I really enjoyed this.

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I love the layout, it's simple and reflects the story well (from what I can tell so far anyway). It doesn't interfere with reading the actual story like some other layouts, which obviously is a bonus.
The time jumps can be a little confusing, but that may just be for me because it's 2:15am and I'm not taking things in well. I love the detail put in to it, I find it really helps bring it to life and means that the main character is more accessible. It'll be interesting to see how the plot moves forwards and how the characters move along with that because they (especially the main one) seem well developed already.
So yeah, this is really good. Keep up the good work (:

:) Amazing!

Love it! Can't wait to read more!

this is so cute, i love it c:

“Good morning, star shine! The earth says, ‘Hello!’” <-- This. What's this from? Teen Titans? I feel like that's it, but I don't think so. Whatever. This is good writing. I encourage you to keep it up. <3

First comment! yay! I can already tell this is going to be a great story! And I am glad I will be along for the ride! I relate to Allie's side of the story :)