But some advice, you're rushing into the story way too fast. You should write out more detail about how she feels. You should show more about her life and etc, not just quickly tell it.
Oh I didn't know this was going to be a Carlisle story! Awesome, i like it so far.
I kind of wish it had showed a little more of what she was thinking when she followed the Cullen family to their home though. It was really great don't get me wrong but that was an opportunity to let some of her charactor out and show us what her personality was.
I expected some kind of argument with herself, you know? To show what she was thinking when she got in her car to follow them. Did she at any moment rethink about following a bunch of strangers simply because Edward was weird to her and had golden eyes?
I may be wrong and she may just be a stubborn person. I'm assuming that because it seemed as if only curiosity that drove her. In my opinion everyone would have doubts about following a stranger home though. I like that you did Lol I rambled I know sorry. It really was a good first chapter, don't just go by what I just said only, that's just something I would have liked to know more about in the chapter. Other then that I really enjoyed it. It's not often that I even come across a Carlisle fanfic. I hope you keep at it!