Concerning the Young Man in the Woods... - Comments

So, I'm new to Mibba and the Comment Swap thing told me to comment on your story. I don't know anything about the fandom it's written for, but you write very well. The journal idea is great, a little different than I'm used to. It reminds me of reading Bram Stoker's Dracula, which was written through journal entries. You seem to have a good grasp of Active voise, something I learned in high school creative writing class. Keep up the good work!

I know and that is quite alright :) still lovely though :)

@ StillTryingToBreathe
why thank you :D
I'll admit, the flow is a bit choppy but, ya know XD
and, I couldn't do that, trust me.
I'm sorry, but, I couldn't.
Because this is a fan-fiction, my friend.
and Agatha is an OC.
I never planned for those two to get together. I am sorry but, I couldn't do that in good conscience.

Comment Swap
I wish it had me find this earlier. It is a bit choppy in flow but it has a nice plot and a story behind it. It is a cool fiction, me being a sap I can't help but wish that Feliciano and Agatha had ended up together. I liked the detail in which you explained the characters and the countries' personalities. It was really a great story. :)

@ Lipstick Lullabies
thank you very much n_n

I'm so happy I found this story! I love the fact that it's basically a journal. There are not many stories on here that are written this way, and I think it's awesome for you to be original like that! I think this story is pretty interesting besides the fact that is in fact a journal. ( I didn't notice that it was a fan fix until I read the info) It's really well written and I give you props for that! :)

@ bvbarmy0714
I just put it in context as "editing" XP
but, ya know, what am I to say?
glad you liked it n_n

i love it i have not seen what you based this story off but i will be checkign it out now beautifully written and just an amazing story and the characters are just amazing.
Don't be afraid to swear in your writing. XD I can't tell if you're censoring yourself or if the character is censoring herself but either way, if a character needs to swear, just do it. No fancy fudges or asterisks, just do it. But if the reason is like a personal "I'll never swear ever" thing, I get it.
i have learned from expeience you tend to get more views and comments if you use swear words because it makes seen more like real life because people sweart as it is other than that i love this story

Haha, I was bound to like this because it's Hetalia! That happens to be one of my favorite cartoons ever and, though I've never played HetaOni, I know the general plot, so I think that this is brilliant. Poor Italy, haha. Bad things always seem to happen to him.

What you're doing here is great; keep it up!

Haha, I was bound to like this because it's Hetalia! That happens to be one of my favorite cartoons ever and, though I've never played HetaOni, I know the general plot, so I think that this is brilliant. Poor Italy, haha. Bad things always seem to happen to him.

What you're doing here is great; keep it up!

@ The_Awesome_Person
Thank you very much n_n
it's a fan-fic, by the way *nods*

Comment swap! I am really really loving this so far. Since it's comment swap I don't really know if this is an original or true or a fan fiction or what.. but either way, it's great! I love that I was so immediately able to relate to the main character. The human emotion put into is really great. It's not like a normal black and white story, and I love that! Keep it up please! :D

@ BaconTommyVicious
Thank you n_n

I'm not familiar with the characters or the plot, but you have great grammar and spelling. I didn't really see any mistakes on my part. :) It was witty, and I loved the the way it was kind of like a diary. Not sure if that was on purpose, but it makes the paragraphs look neater.

Keep up the good work. :D

@ mazohyst
yeah, how? Everyone and their sister knows that line!

@ MysticSongbird That reference completely went over my head omg how did I not get that reference?? XD

@ mazohyst
Well, it's partly that, and partly I really wanted to make a Christmas Story reference XD

Pssst. Don't be afraid to swear in your writing. XD I can't tell if you're censoring yourself or if the character is censoring herself but either way, if a character needs to swear, just do it. No fancy fudges or asterisks, just do it. But if the reason is like a personal "I'll never swear ever" thing, I get it. :L

The new chapter will be up soon, guys! I'm so sorry for the wait! I just need to edit it and stuff n_n~*

Hello, comment swap sent me here. :)
First off, as china-doll said, i came into this story knowing nothing about the fandom or what this was about. Either way, I read through it and really enjoyed it. Everything flowed really nicely and i love how the backround is simple and adds to the story. Besides that, I really enjoyed it even though I'm not a fan. I love the format your storys in,since you dont see many with a journal type. You're a very talented writer, and I cant wait to see what else you put out! :)