June 22nd, 2015 at 05:47am
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I just came across these two stories, and binge read over the last week. It took over my life, I was reading this every moment I had. I was so relieved when atticus wanted to try and adopt Arch, but then all of a sudden, her and ronnie were over !! That was heartbreaking. I never really liked Chance coming into the picture either, but will wait to see what happens. I am hoping for good things to happen in the next instalment of this story.June 17th, 2015 at 09:11am
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OMG. i've followed this story for so long. Can't wait for the sequel.January 12th, 2015 at 05:43am
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I really enjoyed reading both your stories so far and I look forward to the next one. I can't wait for the next part and I hope they end up together.January 11th, 2015 at 07:53am
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I love this! All the tension, it's brilliant. :)January 9th, 2015 at 06:10pm
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I'm so excited to read the unveiling of the plot. I am also excited about the baby. I feel like it will bring them together. Her dad is going to flip out. But overall I'm excited to read the coming chaptersDecember 8th, 2014 at 08:20pm
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Omg I don't want this to end. I want them to be happy and ahh her dad is gonna be so pissed. I wonder how Arch is gonna feel? So many questions!!! Can't wait for the next updateDecember 8th, 2014 at 05:49am
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Loved the update can't wait to read more! So happy she decided to keep the baby now she just need to get back with Ronnie!December 8th, 2014 at 02:55am
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OH MY!!!! SO EXCITED TO READ MOREDecember 6th, 2014 at 03:12am
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Gahh! I want Ronnie Atticus, Arch and the baby to live happily ever after but kinda dont if it makes sense?! I cant wait to read what happens! Your such a great writer keep it up my love!December 3rd, 2014 at 01:06pm
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I just found your stories not to long ago and good lord am I in love with your writing!!! I can't wait to read more, but I'm gonna go look at your other writings while I wait ;)December 2nd, 2014 at 09:39am
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As much as I loved how this story started off, Atticus is just becoming way to annoying to me so I don't think I will continue to read this.November 2nd, 2014 at 09:02pm
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As much as I loved how this story started off, Atticus is just becoming way to annoying to me so I don't think I will continue to read this.November 2nd, 2014 at 09:02pm
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I always wondered how fictional characters could piss people off so much, but now I understand because of Atticus, she seems so naive and self centered bleh lolNovember 2nd, 2014 at 04:53pm
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Poor Ronnie :( Atticus needs to get back with him.November 2nd, 2014 at 04:34pm
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Omg she finally told him. I really want this thing with chance to end because I think Ronnie and Atticus are perfect for each other.November 2nd, 2014 at 03:46pm
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Thank you so good!!October 30th, 2014 at 04:20am
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Neeeeeed an update, love this story. I keep checking daily!October 29th, 2014 at 12:18pm
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yayyyy! Heather will force her too! #teamronnieOctober 19th, 2014 at 01:29am
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Omgggg. Atticus is being stupid. She should have been taken the test.October 16th, 2014 at 12:22pm
For the summary, I think it's okay like that. Although, I don't think "outlawed" is the right choice to describe a relationship. I don't know but that's just my hunch
“Please, all I’m asking for it five minutes. Just- let me explain,”
I think this should be is rather than it.
“Chance, - I don’t know what to say to make this better,”
I don't think you need the hyphen there.
He quieted for a moment
You can use word play as an alternative to quieted. It's kind of awkward to read.
Overall, I think there was a lot of drama bombs. I'm not a huge fan of drama but I think you ended this well albeit the cliffhanger which is annoying (in a good way because that builds suspense). Just proofread your chapters again because you might have typos or awkward word choices here and there that you might wanna change.