Two Pound Coin - Comments

This was a beautiful story and well written. Even though it is a one-shot is has so much detail about the main characters that you can tell what their like and how they lived their lives together.

I really loved the emotion in the story and I could tell you put in a lot of effort. When I reached the last paragraph I was near tears since it was so sad. I could feel her pain, regret and sorrow.

I love the layout and it is super cute. It really adds to the story and the text is still easy to read.

Overall terrific job.

Right away, I could tell that this story was going to hit me right in the feels. And you did that immediately with the first line, asking why it hurts so much. You packed so many emotions in such a small amount of text.

This kind of story is what I like to see on Mibba. I try to do it myself, but you are really what I admire. The descriptions were flawless. You wrote these feelings so perfectly, and I can relate so much to it.

The emotions you wrote in this story were so sad, but beautiful and like I said before, you really hit me in the heart with this one. Not many stories can make me feel like that! this was a perfect story. Wonderful job. :)

I love, love, love how relatable this is. You wrote it in such a way that throughout the piece, I could feel myself relating to the character and what she was going through, even though I've never been in that situation. You manipulated the emotions and words so well that I felt like I was the one leaving things behind, and knew exactly what she was going through.

The story was so simple, as well, but had so much detail and emotion woven through it that added so much depth, it was fantastic. The flow was amazing and some of the sentences almost seemed like song lyrics, because the rhythm they had.

The layout was also gorgeous, and it matched the story very well.

Overall, well done, this was an amazing story!

This was just...I have lost my ability to can.

I absolutely love the way you wrote this. Just the emotion and the way you used the metaphors was simply amazing. Your words were intoxicating. I couldn't get enough of them. It was such a heartbreaking piece as was the character. I like how she mulled over each reason, how there was so much reflection and remembrance.

I also like the significance of the coin and how it reminds her of him. How after all that has happened, she finally realizes how beautiful and appreciative the coin is and also how the boy is. It is a beautiful example of not realizing how much you love something and need it until it's gone.

This was such an amazing and touching story, and I'm only saying it this way because I don't think I can find a better way to describe it. The flow of the story and the words and the emotion you make the reader feel is incredible. I just...I just love it. <3

Oh, wow. This was just beautiful. I love the amount of emotion put into this and how relatable and realistic it was with the concepts of leaving things behind and the range of emotions you experience going through that. I liked that she wasn’t just upset, or just angry, but that you showed each emotion in such a heartbreaking way that I didn’t know how to feel by the end of it.

You slip in so quietly and undetected like carbon monoxide and poison me in my bed at night. This was my favourite line. It really stood out to me.

Your flow is impeccable and by the end of it my breath was literally taken away because your writing just does to me. You’re brilliant, and this is an amazing piece and ugh, I just love this. Love love love.

I loved this story! It was relatable and exceptionally written. You definitely have a way with words and there sure was a lot of great detail in this story.

This was just so beautifully written. There were some lines that were so beautiful I felt like they could be lyrics to a song.

I feel in my heart that nowhere and nothing will ever feel like home in the way that you do.

I think of the days you used to belong to me with a heavy heart.

There were so many lines in this story that were just beautiful. This piece was so descriptive in both a physical sense and a deeper sense. The way you wrote this piece really allowed me to get a feel for the character and how the relationship and the splitting affected them. Usually, in a piece like this, that doesn’t really happen, so you did a very good job with that.

I loved how the character went from being upset, to angry, to regretful. You could just see every part of a break up in the emotion in this piece. It was like the character couldn’t get a hold of themselves to even decide what emotion they were feeling, and I like that.

Each paragraph expressed a new emotion for the character and showed a different part of the relationship. I really like that the character acknowledged that the relationship wasn’t perfect and that the ex had been bad at times, but the character still missed the relationship and the old times they had together.

I feel like this is a piece a lot of people could relate to. Many people have had to deal with walking away from a bad relationship and regretting their decision, so I think it is a message that could reach a lot of different people.

I like that even though this story is character and emotion based, you take the time to describe small details, like the rain rolling down the cab window, and the design of the coin. Little things like that show that you put thought into the piece. Even though they are just descriptions, you can tell they have a deeper meaning that really reflects the piece. Like the rain on the cab distorting the character’s vision could reflect the cloudiness in the character’s mind over the situation. The story has deeper metaphors like those, and more obvious ones like the carbon monoxide bit and the bit about the diamond.

Overall, I just think you did a really excellent job!