August 20th, 2014 at 05:38am
Hey there, lovely writer!
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Can I just say, first and foremost, that this was a beautiful beginning - a great start to a (hopefully) long series! :)
A few minor spelling mistakes (eg: perhaps change the “stood” to “standing” to fit with the rest of the context!) but apart from that, your way of writing with just enough descriptive’s drew me in! As I’m sure was the case with many others!! :) I enjoyed the mystery of it all and the past that is obviously making a come-back! ;)
You are just getting started, and I’m eager to see where this goes!
Keep this up, love!
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Your story is very interesting, I found it lovely. I really like the title, although to be a little more formal I suggest putting a period instead of the "but" in your title (Seasons Change. People Don't). It seems more thought provoking, it also makes it a statement, then again this is just an opinion.
I love the third person, I find it so hard to write in this tense because you really need that story teller gift, and here you seem to have it. Your plot is wonderful, although not really my cup of tea. Everyone has their styles, and I think yours is great, so, please don't get me wrong.
Your imagery is beautiful, and I love your sentence structure, very nice fluidity. Great story.