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  • BeyondGravity7

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    I'm not a fan of one direction. But your writing is extravagant! But because this story involves a boy band that I don't like, it won't stop me from reading this lovely story. I actually love to read stories with this kind of story line. It's very exciting to me lol. It must be a hard choice to choose between Liam and Harry to OD fans. I do admit they are handsome. But keep up the good work! I love the layout, too
    February 29th, 2016 at 11:06pm
  • JJ Everlasting;

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    Okay, so straight off the bat, I absolutely hate One Direction, but I did read it. It was an amazing storyline, but the grammar in the story needs to be tweaked a bit. Honestly I find that it is an amazing story, and if it wasn't One Direction, I would definitely keep reading it as long as you kept updating it. It is definitely an amazing story and you should keep writing it :)
    October 11th, 2015 at 06:01pm
  • little sparrow.

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    So, this story? It needs to continue, like now. This whole plot has me totally hooked already. I mean, how do you choose between Liam and Harry? HOW? The layout, also, is absolutdely beautiful. Excellent work on that. There were a few parts where you switched from past to present tense, but it was easily overlookable. Keep up the excellent work!
    January 2nd, 2013 at 11:07pm
  • Red Guitar

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    This is definitely so awesome. I have been searching for a Liam Payne story and i can't seem to find a good one here anywhere and then i stumble into this beautiful story and i just fell in love with it. The layout is definitely a big awesome and i love how you make Lena so beautiful. I am subscribing and recommending this story in an instant! :)
    December 23rd, 2012 at 02:00pm
  • Jaii

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    This story is so cute already. They just seem so happy together, so it makes me wonder how things are going to end up ;-; The only issue I see is the grammar, the thoughts are there, they just need to be tweaked so that they flow better. Perhaps have someone correct for you, it always helps to have a second pair of eyes when looking to make corrections :) Keep it up~
    December 13th, 2012 at 05:49pm
  • goatman

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    Comment swap brought me here.
    I really wish that your chapters would be a lot longer. Your writing is just fantastic although there's not enough. When it's this good, sometimes, less isn't always more.
    This is such a cute story and Lena just sounds so beautiful, just wow. I don't usually read stuff like this, but I like it a lot.
    And, the layout is beautiful so that's always a plus.
    December 13th, 2012 at 03:10pm
  • nikkiroselyn97

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    Thank God for this beautiful update though you showed me this already. I'm still not going to tell you my favourite part of the new chapter :p
    December 13th, 2012 at 05:23am
  • slumflower

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    Oh my gosh. This is terribly adorable and Lena is so beautiful like wtf. So beautiful. This is a Kit-Kat for Mibbaween and I'm a tad late bit it's not Halloween yet so I hope you'll forgive me Mr. Green Anyways, I really like the layout and summary and such but honestly I'm not sure how I feel about the chapters yet. The present tense kind of throws me off for some reason but that's most likely just me! I love the plot line so far and I really hope that Harry isn't a really bad boyfriend because that's just so cliche ;_; I can't wait to see how Liam and Lena will interact and I really hope Harry doesn't get his heart broken like I think he will Shifty anyways, I liked the two first chapters :)
    October 28th, 2012 at 12:31am
  • Fandango

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    Layout and Summary
    Beautiful layout. Not much else to say other than I think it's lovely. Cute There is a slight typo in the summary. It should read: Is it wrong to love your best mates girlfriend? I'm assuming. Other than that, it's concise and sweet and doesn't give too much away.

    Spelling and Grammar
    A groan escaped Liam's lips as he tried to block out the sex noise that his roommates are making. I'm terribly sorry to be nit-picky. Other than that one error, it's flawless. It's obviously a typo, so I don't think it's fair to criticise you on that. Sorry

    General Plotline
    You left me wanting more already (which is obviously a good thing!). I'm so very curious as to how you're going to have this play out. There isn't much to go on besides an introduction to Liam's feelings toward Lena, so I'll have to sub to see. Well done!

    (Lena is beautiful, by the way. Unsure Not overly done up, which I like.)
    October 27th, 2012 at 08:11am
  • kim wonshik.

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    Lmao! I had no idea this was a One Direction fan fic till I read the second chapter and she mention his name as Mr. Styles and I was like, "What the hell? I've heard that name before." XD
    But yeah, I'm not too fond of the band, but I thought the story was very decent and nicely written. The first chapter had my heart melting and the second made me laugh out loud. There was a sweet flow to the second chapter and I felt bad for Liam. (:
    Keep up the great work!!
    October 26th, 2012 at 07:20am
  • Jensen Ackles;

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    It was good actually, even i it's not my kind of story.
    October 22nd, 2012 at 09:24pm
  • honeyjoons

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    I'm so glad you asked me to comment on this for your candy bowl treat.

    Firstly, it was 1D so YES. Secondly, it was Liam and I haven't found as many Good Liam fics as there should be. Anyway, I LOVE THIS. I find plots like this so interesting for some strange reason. Your writing is fab and I laughed a bit in the second part, here and there. I really enjoy this so far and I subscribed for more!
    October 21st, 2012 at 03:14pm
  • LaRawra!

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    Here is your treat! :) I like the layout. I liked the first chapter a lot. I haven't read any 1d fanfic in a while and this was a good story to have me start liking it again. :)
    October 20th, 2012 at 09:48pm
  • Carpe Diem !

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    Delivering a crunch bar here! Okay so I absolutely love this! You're a very talented writer and you snagged me from the very beginning! I literally wanted I grab Liam and coddle him, so t fact that you made me feel that way is very impressive, seeing as I'm not a very warm hearted person! Loved it and keep up the good work!
    October 15th, 2012 at 10:31pm
  • Ghoul Scouts

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    I'm not into romances but you managed to get me caught up in this one!

    The prologue is so cute! It made me daze off in my own little silly dream world of my own. When I read the first chapter MY EMOTIONS! I had so many emotions put into it. I felt so much pain with the main character and then I had a cursing rant about the girl. xD

    I'm going to subscribe!
    October 13th, 2012 at 10:25pm
  • Little Robyn;

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    OH my god. Poor LIam! I really love this. It's so heartbreaking and sad for Liam, but its good. I can't wait for more!
    October 10th, 2012 at 06:28pm
  • wishful;

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    Sheesh! I feel so sorry Liam. But ugh god.
    September 30th, 2012 at 08:39am
  • Starfeesh

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    I really like this so far
    September 30th, 2012 at 12:13am
  • selfish machine;

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    The dialogue in the beginning made me gag, dear God. Poor Liam for having to hear that. And the poor thing telling himself goodnight... D: Liam, you poor baby, you will get the love you deserve someday!
    September 29th, 2012 at 07:36am
  • feedmetothewolves;

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    My heart goes out to Liam, he wants someone to say goodnight to him besides himself. :(
    September 28th, 2012 at 11:31pm