September 30th, 2012 at 06:04pm
I love how you describe things and I can totally agree with the inability to read while the car is moving. So the reader gets to know Ella and Derek very quickly and efficiently in the first two chunky paragraphs and that is awesome.
The paragraphs...Oh please oh please separate them! It'll be a lot easier to read and enjoy this story if there was more spacing. Some people don't like reading walls of words.
I can totally agree with Ella on the topic of boys, in fact..I'm kind of like her. O.O
Anyway, the character's are very likeable especially Maria, and I hope nothing happens to her or Topher. :<
Hayley x