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awh.. ^_^

Aww, so cute<3 ^_^

So so cute (:

Awww, this was adorable!

Proximity to Requisite - 10/10
It's not that hard to screw this up as it's a picture and you have the visual right in front of you and all. Not that it matters, but I think their on a RV or something, though. Oh well.

Uniqueness of Take on Requisite - 10/10
Who would have thought this had anything to do with MPreg? I never would have thought to use MPreg for this picture.

Layout - 5/10
It's a little bland but not anything that detracts from the story so I'm not too worried about it.

Writing Style - 7/10
(Just a little side note, this is my least favorite part. I don't like implying that my writing is better than anybody else's. This is just my own person opinion so no hard feelings.) Maybe could have had more details, but as fluff, it was more of a dialogue-focused story so maybe detail isn't that manditory.

Emotional Quality - 8/10
You did a terrific job making the reader feeling as giddy and lovestruck as the characters. I was smiling the whole time.

Grammar - 9/10
It's not like I'm going to look at each word under a magnifying glass, so I can't give this a perfect ten, but there were no obvious spelling mistakes or any other sort of major grammar infraction.

Likeability - 8/10
This story was rediculously cute and heartwarming. That's really all there is to say.

edit: Creativity - 6/10
It was just fluff after all, so nothing much happened but it's not like I've read anything like it before

Extra Points -
+1 for being the first to turn in their story
+1 for having a so-romantic-it's-dorky love-interest.

edit: Total: 75/80

So, I wasn't expecting MPreg this early, but oh, well, you did a wonderful job with it. The only thing I can say is I was a little irked by the incomplete explanation of said MPreg. I'm not saying you have to figure out how two guys would make a baby, but a little more would have helped, simply because it felt a little... unfinished. Otherwise, I thought it was a cute little story and I congradulate you on a job well done. :3

Pretty nice. It's a really sweet, lovely story. And you didn't even need to write a whole book to make it good. It's a nice one shot : )

This is amazing!! Is it a oneshot of a story you've already written? If not, I beg you to write it!! I don't usually read mpreg (well, technically I wouldn't have to worry about that since this is later) but I would totally make an exception for this!