January 31st, 2017 at 11:01am
Oh dear.
That was creepy all the way through. Really well done tension and horror. I actually feel sick to my stomach right now because of how well it was done. Sometimes the comment swap stories are painful to read and yours was too but this time in a really good way.
I thought some phrases were awkward while I was reading it but by the end it seemed like it was on purpose because of how sick your MC was.
The only note I can give you is that Angel never really felt real to me. She could use a bit fleshing out in the details.
I’m here because of Comment Swap and I’m pleased that this is the story I was asked to read because it was original, dark and thoroughly enjoyable.