Thank you for the advice and tips, I will fix it soon!! :) thank you so much
September 9th, 2013 at 06:47am
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So here's the deal,
You have a strong concept and and intriguing story, but grammar and such is slowing you down.
It's not a hard fix, either! (-:
I also think you move too fast and unrealistically.
One more debbie-downer...the layout is hard to read. I couldn't finish because I started getting a head ache.
I'm sorry if this is harsh, because I don't mean to be.
What I read I do enjoy because, as I said, it's a great plot.
You should definitely keep up your writing, because you have astonishing potential! xx
