Notes. - Comments

I like how this drabble was was simply about a man playing the guitar and appreciating the music that he is making. And the fact that there was no dialogue and only description made this drabble even better; the lack of dialogue, I think, really enhanced the, what's the word... atmosphere of the piece. Well, that's not exactly the word I am looking for, but it's pretty much close enough.

What I also liked about this was that it was just about the man and his music, with a small appearance by a girl at the end of the drabble. Anyway, this drabble was amazing; I loved pretty much everything about it. Wonderful job!

This was really, really good. I love how you've written it in such a simple way, while still using words that don't necessarily fit the simplicity. And by this I don't mean anything negative. I think it's great. I think it really adds to the story that you've chosen the words you chose.

For me, I think this would have been so much more beautiful if it had been written in past tense. Maybe that's just preference though. I assume your choice of tense is very conscious, and if that's the case I can see why you wrote it in present. When I think of it, either way gives a really good effect. I just got a really strong feeling of a memory when I read this.

To sum up, I think this was really beautifully done. You did a great job with it.

Oh god, this was very beautiful. What I enjoyed most was the simplicity, I think. It was so simple and not complicated with too many feelings or altercations or anything like that. It was about a girl listening to a boy play beautiful music and the way she felt when she did so. One terrific thing I have to point out is practically the entire first paragraph. I loved the description of the music and the way he plays guitar. The way you wrote certain things, such like "Like butterflies, each note flutters through the air..." just made the visual come easy to my mind.

While I believe that this has beautiful word choice and well written, I want to put in my opinion here, and keep in mind it's just an opinion. I don't like the word "oozed" in the third and final paragraph. It's such an ugly word that disrupts a beautiful paragraph... If I may, I suggest a word like radiate or something along that line.

Once again, beautiful work.

One of my first observations would be that this fic would pair well with coffee. [/sorry that is random]
I think this drabble is a really sweet and kinda trippy way of describing the utter awesomeness that is music and also of giving us a look into a moment in the lives of these two characters. We don't know who they are or what they are doing or where they are going in life, but we know this magical, shining moment they shared.
As usual, I am captivated by your style.
I only found one thing that I thought needed to be fixed.
The little smile playing on his lips shows that he’s so emerged in the music that he’s oblivious to the sunset guiding the end of our trip. -I think you meant to say he's "immersed" in the music, not "emerged".
Keep up the good work, dear.

This drabble was so sweet and adorable. I loved the way you linked notes to colors and just the flow of it all. There was no dialogue whatsoever, which only added to the emotion of the piece. It's very clear how the two characters feel about each other. To be able to express that with no dialogue is amazing. The last paragraph was my favorite, simply because the colors appeared during the kiss. It just shows how magical, how musical their love is.

This was probably the best drabble I've read in such a long time. Really, great job!

My first thought when I saw this was the lack of dialogue was nice. A full fledged story needs dialogue, the main focus of a play/ musical is dialogue, but I have found that the best drabbles have no dialogue. The writer simply lets their emotions, their thoughts guide the words as the characters of the piece speak not a single word. That's what makes drabbles unique. They're filled with emotions and aren't so focused on the plot. I just love the way you describe him playing the guitar. I've dated a few band guys who in all honesty I could never speak so highly of as you have done to your boyfriend. I say this after having read your own comment. It's sweet that you seem to care about him so much and hold him up so high, and just from what I read it seems as though he reciprocates those feelings. In short , beautifully and artistically written. I couldn't have done better myself.

I really like that you strictly used description and action in this piece. There was no dialogue, at all, which made the story seem more formal, and certainly more descriptive. You describe everything so delicately, and it all just flows really well. You really have a true talent for descriptive writing! I really wish I could write a piece like this, it’s just wonderful!
The way you described the music as bright colors really just stuck with me, because I know there are some people that have a higher understanding of music and would really see music in this way. This piece is just amazing!

Words cannot describe the way my boyfriend plays the guitar, this is a lame attempt at it. He learns at a ridiculous pace, so he knows too many styles that look really complicated god knows how he's doing it most of the time

He has a youtube channel with some of his older stuff (he complains they're not good and needs new videos) on it if you're interesting in hearing the inspiration behind the words.

He's got an amazing playing style, I haven't seen anyone who can play like he can!