A Maniac's Killing Spree. - Comments

Why is it formatted like this? If it is going to be formatted like this, you might as well put it in the poems section under free verse. Otherwise, try making paragraphs with the lines.
I recommend not adding in emoticons, it makes the writing look unsophisticated. Also, remember to read over your writing and edit it because there are a few spelling and grammatical errors.
Apart from that, it is very curt and to the point, which is why it would fit better under poems. But you have achieved your plot.

Oh you like? Careful now, you might be as twisted as I am.... Kidding. Thank you. It means a lot.

I don't even really know what to say. It's twisted, but still interesting and well written at the same time. Like, the narrators whole demeanor and way of conducting themselves was just deranged and demented. I liked the part about how the narrator said they spray painted on the wall that it was his (her?) town now and that they wouldn't stop until they'd formed them-self a red river. It was weird that I liked this so much, because any normal person would probably be more disturbed than I was or not get as much amusement or such from it. The ending made me laugh, though, with the 'ye haw' part.

Overall, this was a lovely piece. I'd say you've done a fabulous job.