February 12th, 2015 at 03:43pm
I like the ties to the actual Phantom... but the writing itself could use a few commas. Also, the characters don't have much depth and don't come across as very real. Possibly that's because of the brevity of the piece. Also, watch tense switches (past vs. present).
Please understand, I'm trying to be constructive here. It really was an enjoyable read. These are just some things I noticed about it.
Please understand, I'm trying to be constructive here. It really was an enjoyable read. These are just some things I noticed about it.