October 31st, 2012 at 09:00pm
Okay, I finally got round to commenting on the entries, I'll be announcing the winners later so make sure you check the contest thread!
I like the sense of mystery you've created, I think you've set the tone of the scene really well. The plot idea is cool too but it feels a little unfinished. If you carry this on in another story some time it could become quite an exciting saga.
The layout is fairly plain, which is okay, though I did think the contrast of the pink on black made it a little difficult to read.
Your grammar and spelling is generally okay, though there are a number of small errors which could be picked up with careful editing, or perhaps a beta?
Anyway, thanks for entering and be sure to check later for the winners!
Claire xxx
Thanks :)
My grammar and spelling isn't to good but I'll sort it out.
I'm gonna finish that how it was and hopefully later do another part that will be longer :)
I'm not sure how you do layout but hopefully I'll get the hang of it eventually