I found the first chapter - the part in the long summary of the story - a little confusing. I felt like there wasn't enough information available on your characters (I couldn't even figure out which fandom it was or who the characters were).
What I could figure out, though, was that it was a teacher/student relationship kind of fic, which can always be interesting. The thing that stuck out to me the most was that there wasn't really any way to differentiate between the student and the teacher. As a teacher, Kaye really lacked authority. Even though she was saying the words - asking the student about her grades and whatnot - she didn't have that teacher-like feel to her. She seemed too timid and unsure of her position.
I also thought the set up was a bit questionable - a teacher deciding to tutor their student in home without any approval from her parents or the school's principal/dean. It seems really inappropriate - I mean, obviously their relationship will end up being really appropriate anyway, but I think the way they get their - to the relationship - should be a little more realistic.Hello! Welcome to Mibba and congrats on posting your first piece.
I came across this piece while browsing stories and noticed that you're a new writer here so I thought I'd offer some tips to help you make it through your first story here on Mibba.
Spelling, grammar, and formatting
Proper spelling and capitalization on stories is highly sought after here on Mibba. Along with proper formatting (making sure your paragraphs are spaced, it's clear who's speaking...), it makes the story a lot easier to read and fall into, and readers generally take authors (and their story) more seriously if it looks like they've put in the effort to proofread. If you need help with spelling and grammar stuff with your story, you can always post in the Editing and Proofreading thread and ask for help - someone will message you and let you know if they're willing to help you edit or proofread your story.
Having a title
Naming a story can be pretty hard but since it's really the first thing readers see of your story, it's important to make sure you have one. Even if it's just temporary - you can always change it later - it's good to have a real title on your story when you post it. It also helps readers find your story later, if they'd like to come back to it.
Don't forget to add tags
Tags are how readers find your story in the search. They're especially important if you're working on a fan fiction - because including tags can help other people who love that fandom find your story and become new readers.
What I could figure out, though, was that it was a teacher/student relationship kind of fic, which can always be interesting. The thing that stuck out to me the most was that there wasn't really any way to differentiate between the student and the teacher. As a teacher, Kaye really lacked authority. Even though she was saying the words - asking the student about her grades and whatnot - she didn't have that teacher-like feel to her. She seemed too timid and unsure of her position.
I also thought the set up was a bit questionable - a teacher deciding to tutor their student in home without any approval from her parents or the school's principal/dean. It seems really inappropriate - I mean, obviously their relationship will end up being really appropriate anyway, but I think the way they get their - to the relationship - should be a little more realistic.
Hello! Welcome to Mibba and congrats on posting your first piece.
I came across this piece while browsing stories and noticed that you're a new writer here so I thought I'd offer some tips to help you make it through your first story here on Mibba.
Spelling, grammar, and formatting
Proper spelling and capitalization on stories is highly sought after here on Mibba. Along with proper formatting (making sure your paragraphs are spaced, it's clear who's speaking...), it makes the story a lot easier to read and fall into, and readers generally take authors (and their story) more seriously if it looks like they've put in the effort to proofread. If you need help with spelling and grammar stuff with your story, you can always post in the Editing and Proofreading thread and ask for help - someone will message you and let you know if they're willing to help you edit or proofread your story.
Having a title
Naming a story can be pretty hard but since it's really the first thing readers see of your story, it's important to make sure you have one. Even if it's just temporary - you can always change it later - it's good to have a real title on your story when you post it. It also helps readers find your story later, if they'd like to come back to it.
Don't forget to add tags
Tags are how readers find your story in the search. They're especially important if you're working on a fan fiction - because including tags can help other people who love that fandom find your story and become new readers.