Hold Me Close and Breathe Me In - Comments

Found this story when I did "Comment Swap", and I must say, I love your use of detail, its amazing and really sets the scene for me. It had me intrigued from the start, can't wait to read the next chapter

It's a nice pace. Keep going

Came from the comment swap. I like it very much, it's interesting, but at times like the entire time Lillith and Michael met was extremely reminiscent of Twilight. Just try to keep everything fresh is all I have to say but you are pretty good with detail. Good job. Can't wait to see more.

I like the writing style, it honestly has a flair to it that I like. The chapter was rather good too, it got my attention rather quickly (which is a hard thing to do, I'll admit) and then proceeded to keep it. I will continue reading, most definitely, and can't wait to see another chapter.

Other than that, criticism wise, there's only a couple small spelling/grammar areas but they are small enough that unless you're looking for them, they're unnoticeable.

I loved this. :) Your use of description was A+ and I like your style of writing. I feel like I can relate to Lilith in several ways and I really like the character of Michael. He seems covert, and I like it. Kudos to you. :)

Wow. It's been a while since I've stumbled upon a promising story. I was completely taken by the first chapter. Envisioning the little world you've created so far seems enchanting, even if it is just a public high school. I've never read a story with angels in it, so I guess I'm in for a ride, huh? (unless the term 'angel' is just a figure of adoration and means nothing more) I'll be looking forward to this story. :)

Pretty good so far :) Lilith reminds me a lot of myself, except I'm not rich :P lol. Michael also seems to be intriguing, I like his awkward encounter with Lilith, it was kind of cute. The descriptions are really well written and I was able to come up with a detailed scenery. I enjoyed the first chapter and looking forward to an update :)