Kiss of Death - Comments

Okay, I am just so in love with Reed. He is just so strong and he always knows exactly what to do. I love that he cares about Scout so much and is worried about keeping her safe. During the games, I like how he was worried about whether or not the water was poisoned and that he took the time to think worry about Scout in that situation! He is just so sweet and charming! I really have no idea who is going to end up winning and I'm really scared to see what happens in the end! I really hope they are able to figure something out to save them both!

I loved that update!

First i have to say that I really like hunger games.

chapter one- I love the way you wrote it, i felt like I was really there. I got confused for a second between reed and ash but then caught on and was like wait reed isnt her boyfriend. i like the difference from this to the actual movie and it makes me want to read more...

as a matter of fact i will be reading chapter two... now.

chapter two- you described the feeling she got from being called up very well, i would have been shitting bricks.. the emotion all together is amazing, i feel like she loves reed or cares for him deeply.

all together this story is amazing so far, i will continue to read it. it is extremely different from the original HG and it makes it a lot more interesting. =D

I didn't know you wrote Hunger Games fanfic! This is amazing! I really like Reed. I sort of have a crush on him. I really like how big and strong he is, and how cute he is with Maven! I really like that you didn't make Scout like Katniss because lots of stories do that. This is realy great!

YES, FINALLY A GOOD HUNGER GAMES FIC.

Oh man it's about to go down.

I love this!

so a hunger games thing, that is cool. your prose are flat but then again you don't have a lot of leeway in terms of artistic freedom, what with working in someone elses style. I guess my main peiec of advice is that scout's charecter is a little to mush like katniss her back story is also basically the same. invent some new charecter archetypes with different talents and abilites instead of relying on the tropes from the existing novels

Aww yay update!

DYING OF THE EXCITEMENT

I love the update! I can't wait for Reed's interview!

aw, this was sweet. I'm really excited to see what Reed has to say! it makes me sad that Scout didn't really get to talk herself up much to make people like her for her, not just for the fact that she and Reed are best friends. but I suppose that's not really her personality though, is it!

My first impression of this basically turned on the banner. I love the font you've chosen and the photographs you've merged. In terms of the rest of the layout, the background is a little distracting, and the border and content area are a little plain, but overall it isn't too bad.

You haven't got a very long summary, which is strange to me. There's no real way for me to know what to expect from this story, except for your visual clues. I'm guessing at this stage that it's a Hunger Games fanfic, just judging from the word 'district.' In your summary, the most interesting thing, I think, is the way you have already drawn a distinction of gender between your prospective characters, just through use of the male and female signs. Does this mean a boy and a girl will be going head to head?

In terms of your actual chapters, your description is strong. I like the way you open with an image, through your reference to 'painting the sky'. This has me immediately interested- I normally wouldn't read a story without strong imagery. I haven't read the Hunger Games series, so I can't comment on how well your fic links in with the cannon, but you also seem to have established a plot in the first chapter, which gives your story some direction. The only thing I would really recommend in terms of your first chapter is condensing some of your floating sentences into bigger paragraphs. At present, your writing looks a little fractured.

The second and third chapters again begin solidly, and contain nice images and fully fleshed out dialogue. I didn't find any errors in terms of spelling and grammar, so substantively, I'm judging this story to be good. It's not the kind of thing I would ordinarily read, but I think it will find a popular following.

Best of luck with your writing!

ooh. smug little hunger games contestants trying to be all intimidating. YOU BETTER WATCH YOURSELF LYRA BEFORE REED PUTS AN AXE IN YOUR back.

also I hope that they need to remember which foods are poisonous later in the story, I love that foraging stuff.

I loved the update, Katie! You did an amazing job as always

Well alright, this story is awesome so far. I am a huge fan of the Hunger Games so this was really awesome to read. First off, I love the layout ^-^
I think the charactarization of Scout is really well done - you can tell from the start that she's extremely caring and devoted to those who are important to her, and that's she's truly courageous even though she's faced with one of the most terrifying feats of her life. The writing is also really well done, good description and the sentences are not too complex or distracting!
The one thing I would say is I would maybe include a little more explaination and description in the parts that have to do with the games, like the chariot ride and the makeover, etc. I realize that you're writing to an audience that has already read the series and is familiar with these things, but I think adding more description of these things could really make it accessible to people who haven't read the series :)
OVERALL, I love this. Subscribed & recommended, for sure.

I really like this story! I also have a Hunger Games fic with a main character from District 7 named Scout, oddly enough. Love the name, love the district, and love your story thus far! Please update soon!

Rikashey, rikashey, you take your aim...SHOOT ME DOWN, BUT I WON'T FALL! I AM TITANIUM! Sorry.

Firstly, I love that you are writing this. I loved the movie and so far as I comment I am reading, at this moment I am on the first chapter. I dont get picky with errors or grammer stuff, dont worry.

So far I have read the first chapter (only because the walking dead just came on.) But I have to say I really like it so far and I plan on reading more. I would love to see where this goes, so as of right now I will reccomend and subscribe.

Once I read more I will comment again. :) but keep up the good work.

Reed’s outfit was almost identical to Reed’s except
I think one of them is suppoused to pre-haps say Scout and the other be Reed? I might be wrong though but I thought I might bring this to your attention.

“Now comes the hard part.
It looks like here all you've done is leave off a quotation mark again not really a big deal but I thought you might like to know

Thats really honestly all I seen mistake wise my dear, other then that flawless, is what this chapter was you've a way with Describing things that I really I actually could picture Reed and Scout in the leaves and being uncomfortable and what not in them..

You've got me feeling very intense still about this story and I like that I like that a lot, I havent read very many stories at all online or an actual book that makes me feel as intense and worried as what you've written here doese...

Now what i didn't like about this chapter is I think it was mostly all Description and scene's I think there needs to be a bit more talking and things, like we need to get to sort of know her team or at least the Stylist and he Mentors I think we need to know more about them or hear them talk stratigy with the two tributs..

But its not a very big down fall evenw ith such little talking I really enjoyed this chapter a lot more then the one before it..

Much <3 Kat.

P.S Now I'm going to bug you till you update the other story!