And It Exploded - Comments

I'd never read a Brendon/ Ryan slash, but I enjoyed this. The pairing is rather interesting, and I loved it. The detail is perfect. You have a great writing style. I will defiantly go on and read some more of your writing, you are amazing.

I've heard of this ship, but never really read into it.

It doesn't matter though, I like what you wrote. Your detailing is on point and even though it's like 600 words, it fills you up enough to be satisfied that it's just a one shot. :) I like your styling, too.

@ Draco.Malfoy
Aw thanks.

I'm not really one for slash, I find it strange to read but since you requested it I gave it a shot. You are a very skilled writer. As others have mentioned, I liked that the writing was passionate and not raunchy. You have a gift for writing.

Hi there!

I'll preface this by saying I don't know who Brendon and Ryan outside of this story, so I'll be commenting as if they're just characters.

I noticed one typo in my reading - ...until his mouth in on his... I believe you mean "is" instead of "in" here.

I like the way that you wrote this. It has a robotic feel, almost, with the choppiness of the sentences. I usually don't care for stories that tell you instead of show you, but for here it really works with the "explosions" and emotion going on.

You did a good job at conveying personalities of the characters through subtle things - Ryan being awake, Brendon being the scared one.

I'm not a slash reader at all, but reading this wasn't uncomfortable. You managed to make it poetic without seeming like too much.

Over all, you did a great job with this! Happy writing!

xxx Bee

I normally don't read slash, but this was..interesting..haha. I just end up feeling awkward when I read slash...I'm sorry.

I don't usually enjoy slash, but the way you've written this really did not bother me at all. I like that it was passionate as opposed to demanding and raunchy, and I love how the repetition of the explosion made it suspenseful! I really enjoyed reading this!!

Why are you so amazing? I don't read slash just to read it but I am so glad that I got to read this. I like that it isn't raunchy, it's just enough to be satisfying. I feel like you've left me wanting more with this one and Vacant.

Bravo! Really, excellent writing piece.

Holy crap, that was amazing. I love how Ryan was almost compleatly calm and collected, and how Brendon just wanted to feel him before he died. It was great!

Comment swapper here. The writing is well done and a little different from other stories in the same vein. I usually don't read stories like this but this one was pretty good. I also like that there is a small bit of mystery to how they got to what is happening at this moment.