October 20th, 2012 at 08:35am
This was incredible!
I loved how you had an entire story line that was so detailed without being overbearing - I got an exact sense of the main characters without you spending three or four paragraphs explaining them, and as well Maddie and Mike were so consistent with their characters (even when throwing in some lyrics - I loved that!) Fantastic story, I absolutely love Maddie's character - is it wrong to want this story to continue?
Jeff cracked me up in this and this line made me LOL.---------> 'I turned around to see an overly spray tanned blonde that I had met a few times before.
“What’s up, Carts?” I replied.'....I totally thought it was going to be some girl trying to talk to her, but it was Jeff. too funny!