first of all, um, good god. the layout. the picture is kinda disturbing/frightening, but i feel like it's going to fit well with the story, just judging from the summary. i also really like the simplicity of the layout; it doesn't take away from the story. c:
ooooh, breaking the fourth wall, kinda. i like it!! i also like the ominious tone of this, the "you don't know me, but i know you." you portrayed this very well in such few sentences. i'm all goosebumpy, but very excited to see and read the rest of this! you've done a very good job fleshing this mysterious narrator out so far. (:
This sounds so epic. I can't wait to read more. 
first of all, um, good god. the layout. the picture is kinda disturbing/frightening, but i feel like it's going to fit well with the story, just judging from the summary. i also really like the simplicity of the layout; it doesn't take away from the story. c:
ooooh, breaking the fourth wall, kinda. i like it!! i also like the ominious tone of this, the "you don't know me, but i know you." you portrayed this very well in such few sentences. i'm all goosebumpy, but very excited to see and read the rest of this! you've done a very good job fleshing this mysterious narrator out so far. (: