Altogether, I thought this was really good :) I can see now why the word limit was difficult, since letters generally aren't the longest pieces of writing and adding any more to this would make it repetitive and too lengthy. I also thought the way you managed to use all the words in the correct form and in the correct way was very good.
I try and give three points of improvement when writing constructive criticism. So, here we go.
1. Although it isn't really about the writing itself, I'd tweak the layout a bit. I do like the image and style, but with the combination of colours means the text is really difficult to read. White would've been just as bad, but I just wanted to point out that it was difficult on the eyes.
2. One or two sentences sounded a bit odd when I read through them. The first that comes to mind is 'I am one hundred percent sure I don't need you in my life anymore, minus the fact you will always be around.' I'm not sure what it was about the sentence, but I suppose it was just the use of minus. I'm really sympathetic towards that since it is just an issue with fitting in a word, but there are ways of making that sentence sound better, or you could use minus in a different way completely.
3. In the second to last paragraph there were too many short sentences. It wasn't that bad, but there are a few places where it would've been okay to use a comma.
Well done! I really loved the content of the story and the fact that it wasn't just a normal format. Characters and snippets of plot remaining a mystery is always a good thing in a short story, since it makes it feel like you've been momentarily dropped into another person's world (or in this case, stumbled upon a letter) where you only see what they want you to see. Thank you for your entry!
I try and give three points of improvement when writing constructive criticism. So, here we go.
1. Although it isn't really about the writing itself, I'd tweak the layout a bit. I do like the image and style, but with the combination of colours means the text is really difficult to read. White would've been just as bad, but I just wanted to point out that it was difficult on the eyes.
2. One or two sentences sounded a bit odd when I read through them. The first that comes to mind is 'I am one hundred percent sure I don't need you in my life anymore, minus the fact you will always be around.' I'm not sure what it was about the sentence, but I suppose it was just the use of minus. I'm really sympathetic towards that since it is just an issue with fitting in a word, but there are ways of making that sentence sound better, or you could use minus in a different way completely.
3. In the second to last paragraph there were too many short sentences. It wasn't that bad, but there are a few places where it would've been okay to use a comma.
Well done! I really loved the content of the story and the fact that it wasn't just a normal format. Characters and snippets of plot remaining a mystery is always a good thing in a short story, since it makes it feel like you've been momentarily dropped into another person's world (or in this case, stumbled upon a letter) where you only see what they want you to see. Thank you for your entry!