I like to do my comment swaps in sections, so just bare with me because I really do like focusing on one thing at a time.
The layout, I really wish the layout was not the default Mibba one. I know the stories' contents are the ones supposed to attract the attention of the reader, but layouts are always a plus when it comes to setting a mood for the story, so I'm not fond of the use of the default layouts.
I do like the title of the story because it has this air of nostalgia to it and it is a simple title and easy to relate to.
I loved that your description of the story was straight to the point; I love summaries that are actual summaries, and not quotes from other authors, or song lyrics, or things that do not add anything for the reader to be hooked to the story, so I think your summary is a plus.
Your subtitle for the chapter is a great foreshadowing of what is to happen inside the story; of course, this clicks once you read the entire piece, but it has a nice tone to it when you're just about to read and combining it to the summary it sets up a very sad, nostalgic feeling combined with regret.
I really liked the narration and how it shifts from the present and the regret to bad memories and good memories; it helps build a background to both characters (Chloe and her dad) and establish the type of relationship that they had, which is a typical daughter/father relationship. I am not sure what age is Chloe, but I keep reading her as a 10 year old due to how she reaches the conclusion that it was her fault due to the times she said she hated him. I also like that your story is more based on dialogue; it adds more personality to the character and makes her more realistic.
I really did like the ending and how it leaves a nice, nostalgic feeling, taking away the guilt and regret that Chloe felt at the end.
Overall, I think this is a very well written story and I loved the characterization and narration style that you used.
The layout, I really wish the layout was not the default Mibba one. I know the stories' contents are the ones supposed to attract the attention of the reader, but layouts are always a plus when it comes to setting a mood for the story, so I'm not fond of the use of the default layouts.
I do like the title of the story because it has this air of nostalgia to it and it is a simple title and easy to relate to.
I loved that your description of the story was straight to the point; I love summaries that are actual summaries, and not quotes from other authors, or song lyrics, or things that do not add anything for the reader to be hooked to the story, so I think your summary is a plus.
Your subtitle for the chapter is a great foreshadowing of what is to happen inside the story; of course, this clicks once you read the entire piece, but it has a nice tone to it when you're just about to read and combining it to the summary it sets up a very sad, nostalgic feeling combined with regret.
I really liked the narration and how it shifts from the present and the regret to bad memories and good memories; it helps build a background to both characters (Chloe and her dad) and establish the type of relationship that they had, which is a typical daughter/father relationship. I am not sure what age is Chloe, but I keep reading her as a 10 year old due to how she reaches the conclusion that it was her fault due to the times she said she hated him. I also like that your story is more based on dialogue; it adds more personality to the character and makes her more realistic.
I really did like the ending and how it leaves a nice, nostalgic feeling, taking away the guilt and regret that Chloe felt at the end.
Overall, I think this is a very well written story and I loved the characterization and narration style that you used.