She Is the Sunlight - Comments

Spell checks: rediculas is ridiculous.

This was really, really long! Haha. You had a cute story line though. You need to space out your paragraphs and separate them from your lines of dialogue. I don't know if you wrote it on Word or not but Word usually takes your spaces out when you paste your writing into the chapter box on Mibba so it may not have been your fault.

I don't listen to MCR or know anything much about any of the guys in it but the nice thing about your story was that I didn't necessarily need to know anything about them because the band was just starting in this story. That was nice.

If you don't know where to space things out, you can ask an editor in one of the help forums here!

Hello, comment swap sent me to this lovely gem here. So let's get down to the nitty gritty, shall we? Just a few spelling and grammatical errors, but every story has that. No big deal. My biggest vice just because it's my personal pet peeve is that you didn't space between dialogue and new paragraphs. Other than that, good job.