Digging this to the n-th power. I absolutely adore your words and syntax, it reads like poetry and it's so descriptive in a restricted and specific sort of way... you know... like, you perfectly described the narrator's thirst and need to be on the road as well as the relationship she shares with her parents and it was just enough to make me want to keep reading to find out why they began such a nomadic lifestyle and where, if anywhere, are they going
Now, there were some sentence fragments that I suppose compliment this style of writing but I think you can find a away to keep this style and use full sentences like in the very beginning with "and the shadows." There was another further down though I can't see it on my phone while I comment... all in all, excellent start. I know, personally, if I was stuck on the road with my parents for days on end, only one of us would make it out with our sanity so I look forward to the rest!
Now, there were some sentence fragments that I suppose compliment this style of writing but I think you can find a away to keep this style and use full sentences like in the very beginning with "and the shadows." There was another further down though I can't see it on my phone while I comment... all in all, excellent start. I know, personally, if I was stuck on the road with my parents for days on end, only one of us would make it out with our sanity so I look forward to the rest!