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  • heretic.

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    I'm really sad that the story has ended, I loved it a lot! Eeeep a mini Shadows has been created and and Alice and Brian are all loved up! Yes, Brian is a huge man child XD

    I loved that Helen got nothing, little bitch *throws rocks at her* and I'm glad they finally got their acts together and admitted their love for each other, I'm swooning just a tad over here, hello hot office sex tehe

    Loved it! :D
    October 28th, 2013 at 11:10pm
  • gothique4

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    Awww I love the ending, and had to giggle about them "contaminating" the work place lol

    Squeee there's a baby Shadows on the way!!! And yes I agree Bri's a man-child :p
    April 27th, 2013 at 11:17am
  • PhenoBarbiDoll

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    This was absolutely amazing! I loved it from start to finish! Thank you for writing it :-)
    April 23rd, 2013 at 09:07am
  • HanerJoy

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    awwwwwwww :D loved it :D and I agree 100% with @ AJ9 :D
    April 22nd, 2013 at 06:15pm
  • AJ9

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    Loved it. You should do an epilogue where Brian and Alice get married Wink
    April 22nd, 2013 at 06:12pm
  • Angel of Vengeance

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    Loved this! This was a great ending to a good story. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
    April 22nd, 2013 at 05:47pm
  • Brian Haner Jr

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    Sex, cookies, babies and the end. :D It was great! I loved how I just knew straight away what you two had been up to XD And Brian just freely admitting to it lololol.
    And hello pregnancy!! tehe I am excited for it!
    I'm sad to see this story go too, I have loved it so!!
    I love you, I love this, and I look forward to all the new adventures we shall take :D
    April 22nd, 2013 at 04:39am
  • PhenoBarbiDoll

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    That's called KARMA, bitch! Lol. I loved it!!!!!!! And I admire Alice for being, ya know, relatively calm. There was so much more she could have thrown at Helen when Helen started begging for mercy, but she truly was the bigger person here. BAM! I am sad that there's only one chapter left, but I'm so subscribing to the other story. I LOVE your writing!
    April 9th, 2013 at 12:59am
  • BeenDownThatRoad

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    Fuck yeah! this was so awesome. The wicked bitch gets whats due!! lol. And kudos to Alice for being strong and holding it together!! I cant wait for more:)
    April 6th, 2013 at 09:15am
  • gothique4

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    Yay!!!!!!!!!!! The cheating evil skank got nothing. There is a god! I'm doing a happy dance right now :-)

    I wouldn't have given her two days either - I would have just shoved her out the door right then.
    April 6th, 2013 at 12:17am
  • HanerJoy

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    O.O OOOMMMMGGGG!!!!! an affair with the lawyer lol the same lawyer in front of them!!!!! OMG!!!!! wel Helen tel Mr. Lawson to give you a home and money, to see if he does.
    April 5th, 2013 at 09:33pm
  • Angel of Vengeance

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    LOVED THIS!!! Helen totally got what she deserved. She's lucky Alice gave her two days to pack. I'd given her two hours...lol. So looking forward to the last chapter. :D
    April 5th, 2013 at 05:24am
  • Brian Haner Jr

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    *slow clap* You go Alice. I'm proud of you honey.
    Difficult situations are never easy, but I guess it does make things simpler when there's no shadowing. Helen was a bitch who deserved nothing, she's lucky she got the clothing. Alice really could have kicked her to the curb with nothing and then had a field day burning all Helen's clothing, that could have been fun haha. But I'm glad she was mature and sensible about the ordeal. Now, to move on with her life.
    I freaking loved this, I'm so glad that's over for Alice, she doesn't have to worry about it anymore, she can move on and mourn now.
    One more chapter to go, le cry!
    April 5th, 2013 at 04:37am
  • PhenoBarbiDoll

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    Poor Alice! I'm glad she got to see him and say her piece, and I'm glad she has Brian by her side. Even though it hurts, it was best for her father to let go. He needed to know someone was there to take care of his daughter. I've actually seen someone do that...my grandfather passed away less than 24 hours after my grandmother told him it was okay.

    Now I dread her first interaction with Helen. If she snaps and stabs her, I think we'll all cheer. ;)
    March 29th, 2013 at 09:39am
  • Brian Haner Jr

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    That awkward moment when things start out all bow chicka wow wow only for them to end up stabbing you right in the feels. My broken and bleeding self. *sobbing*

    I'm gutted he's gone and that Alice is hurting so much, but at least she got her words in and now he can, and has, let go. Helen better get nothing, btw. If she gets anything, I hope it's a switf kick in the ass from yours truly. She's a grade one a-hole with severe attitude no-problem. Bitches need slappin'.

    Loved it bub!! I look forward to more, and the updates of everything elses you are writing :D
    March 28th, 2013 at 02:13pm
  • gothique4

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    Awww now after that awesome sex I'm just sad that her father's passed away, but at least he's at piece now. I think he was just holding on to make sure that Alice was OK.

    Now I suppose Helen's gonna go apeshit even more for his money, and I stand by that I really hope Alice gets everything and she can kick the bitch out onto the street :-)
    March 28th, 2013 at 11:42am
  • Angel of Vengeance

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    Aww, this was a super sad ending to an interesting chapter. I really hope Alice will be okay. Loved the update though. Looking forward to more. :D
    March 27th, 2013 at 10:58pm
  • HanerJoy

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    Poor Alice :( but took a lot of heart saying that to her dad :) and is true :) he's going to be with her always :) and he won't feel any pain :) Update soon :D
    March 27th, 2013 at 08:22pm
  • Matt Sanders;

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    I can't wait to read more! This is so sad D:! This story is amazing!
    March 27th, 2013 at 07:31pm
  • niklitera

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    UPDATE!?
    March 26th, 2013 at 03:33pm