The Meeting Place - Comments

which Sunday...? and its good please keep it coming and dont stop please..

Can you guys keep the bad comments to yourself and just read the damn story, jeez. It's not that big of a deal. As long as you know what she's trying to say, it's perfectly fine.
By the way, keep up the good work, can't wait for you to update, love.

I gave your story a shot and I must say that plot wise, your story shows a lot of potential and I'm actually liking the pace it's going so far. The characters seem interesting and I do want to get to know more about them. That being said, the story has issues.

First of all, formatting wise? I'm not really certain if this is an issue because of having them set as double spaced in word and that not translating well to mibba or what, but you've got some paragraphs clearly spaced correctly, and then you have a ton of others that just aren't. On top of that? Your grammar and punctuation are, to put it bluntly, a mess. You don't capitalize the first word in all your dialogue or the first letter in some names. You put unnecessary spaces before and after punctuation while also just leaving out some punctuation completely. Some punctuation is just incorrectly used. I'd recommend finding an editor for your story.

The most awesome part? She has my name