Contest Judging Comment: Originality: 8/10 The signing off a child to the devil thing has been done a couple of times but not so much that its cliche. Character Development: 3/10 Angel was kind of half baked, don't you think? She was all too willing to go along with the Devil. She questioned nothing, and she didn't even resent her mom a little bit. And Lucifer, well he was really out of character considering the fact that he's the devil. I mean he was just so unbelievable nice and accommodating. Plot: 8/10 The plot didn't come to quickly and I'm glad you didn't rush anything. You explained things too (like they're reason to move). Grammar and Spelling: You only had three errors. You get +5 points for the layout. +5 points for the romance with the devil. And +5 points for the setting being in a different country. Unfortunately you get -5 points for submitting you story late.
Anyway, you started out with 50 points and ended with, 71 points. Check the contest page on December 20th to see if you won.
Originality: 8/10
The signing off a child to the devil thing has been done a couple of times but not so much that its cliche.
Character Development: 3/10
Angel was kind of half baked, don't you think? She was all too willing to go along with the Devil. She questioned nothing, and she didn't even resent her mom a little bit.
And Lucifer, well he was really out of character considering the fact that he's the devil. I mean he was just so unbelievable nice and accommodating.
Plot: 8/10
The plot didn't come to quickly and I'm glad you didn't rush anything. You explained things too (like they're reason to move).
Grammar and Spelling: You only had three errors.
You get +5 points for the layout. +5 points for the romance with the devil. And +5 points for the setting being in a different country.
Unfortunately you get -5 points for submitting you story late.
Anyway, you started out with 50 points and ended with, 71 points. Check the contest page on December 20th to see if you won.