August 9th, 2013 at 04:19am
“No, it seems that we ran out of horse heart. We have bacon, you could eat that.”
LOL! I love her. Onolee (I hope I've spelt that right) is so frickin' witty and sharp. and she just takes everything in her stride but I know she could just turn and stab one of these dudes in the heart if she had to. Winning combination haha.
“Will it disgust you if I do not cook it?” he asked. Since when the hell did he care? The guy had that ‘I only care about me’ attitude.
It will disgust me.
“Where the hell are your clothes? We aren’t a fucking nudist colony. We like leather here, and jeans, and cotton, and basically things that cover most private places.”
LOL! I could have highlighted the whole thing here. I love how comfortable he is just strolling around naked. Ok the naked image is going to stay with me for the rest of the chapter now no matter how hard I try to get rid of it haha.
I wasn’t sure if I was going to be frozen solid at the sight of him or crumble into shards of ice. Neither sounded pleasant.
No, none of that sounds pleasant.
I love how you break up the humour with moments like this, when you remind the reader how terrifying and unpredictable and just bloody dangerous these creatures/demons/supernatural beings are.
“And a good everything.”
Bahaha, demon perving.
“Calm down there, Tank, wouldn’t want to give yourself a heart attack in your old age,” I talked into my bowl of cereal.
Can I highlight the entire thing for use of witty banter?
I WANT MORE NOW.
Geez, I know you have a life and everything but I want more of this story. I wasn't even joking earlier on twitter when I said I got all excited. I fangirled. Yep, it happened. And I had to explain to my friend that your writing is the shit and you should be published because it has the perfect amount of realism/supernatural/originality/horror/uncertainty/hotness/humour, etc, etc.
Dmitri in the kitchen cracked me up. I definitely was not expecting a naked demon in this chapter. Not even a little bit. And horse heart? Really? What is he, a fucking Khaleesi?
I love how Onolee and Logan play off each other too. So much fucking snark. It's great. And tormenting Tank? Priceless! I almost feel bad for the guy, getting double teamed by them. But then he makes an arrogant comment and I realize he kind of deserves it.
I can not WAIT to read about "seeing what everyone's got". Like really, I can't. So excited for that! I'm really hoping you get that chapter out soonish, but I know how stressful your semesters can be. I suppose I'll have to try to keep my nagging and begging to a minimum.