Entwine - Comments

This is gorgeous. I love the way you've written it. Your word choice is stunning. It's simple, but the way you described things is just beautiful. I like the use of run-on sentences. It adds a dreamy kind of feel, like the narrator is just lost in this feeling of love and is happily rambling on about how great it truly is. I also like the repetition of the first paragraph slightly changed in the last one. I thought it was brilliantly done.

your stomach begins to pirouette…

This line is just such a creative way to describe it. The dance metaphor just makes it more lovely sounding, if that's possible.

Overall, your imagery is beautiful and this is wonderfully written. It's so cute and it's uplifting and I'm so glad I read it.

this is sad because i know how it feels like. amazing

i know that feel. this is beautiful.

um wow
This is amazing
Too amazing...
I love the shortness of it and this layout is just too cute. You're great.

reading this kinda made me sad. but it's so lovely. your writing is amazing. and i've read a bunch of your other stuff, and it's amazing as well. you truly have a gift. keep up the good work c: (i'd also really love to see you write a full garrett nickelsen story, since you have those one-shots)