Every Tomorrow - Comments

SINCE WHEN WAS KALLEN A DALMATIAN!?
Oh god, if she knew Maxwell might die from her eyes.
Wow, I thought Maxwell would eventually get balls and come out, turns out his mom just threatened to purée them if he didn't.
“He’s a man, technically.” Oh, Maxwell's god the sass to make up for the lack of guts.
Oh, I take it back, his put his tail between his legs when she called him out on it.
"Mom, Dad, I’m gay." Way to keep it cliche.
“Minnie is gay too." I think I heard Maxwell's mom's heart crack.
I want to say that Maxwell got guys when he stood up and said he was moving out, but it was out of anger and anger isn't brave. Anger is more commonly experienced when someone is scared or confused. Which I get why Maxwell would be, so in this case I can't bash on him for being scared. Ya'know, if he's scared in the first place. I could be reading too far into this. But if he's scared simply because of being kicked out then he's a pussy because he's a grown ass man and should not be scared of leaving home.
I like the whole dad to son heart to heart thing, but I think it came on too fast. Not like time in the story, but like there wasn't enough words leading up to it.
I'm kind if pissed that his dad doesn't even attempt to reason with his mom on him moving out.
Well, at least Maxwell's thoughtful.

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"He's too attractive" Really? That's the first thing he thinks? Come on.
Aw, it was really cute until you brought up the fact that Ezekiel is going to get lung cancer.
Hey, Power Rangers is the way to anyone's heart.
Cusp. Huh.
I guess Ezekiel's the only one who likes getting injections. *winkwink* (that was a sex joke)
Where the fuck does all this money come from?
“That is the most ridiculous thing I’ve ever heard. You’re a Hawthorne.” Yes
Oh, hey, you did the reverse gender role thing again.
Yeah, I'm not entirely sure who was at the game. Was it Ezekiel and his family or Ezekiel an Minnie?
Once again, Maxwell needs to get his balls back from his mom's purse.
Also, I think Ezekiel is too understanding. It's not even that he's being understanding, its that he's trying to justify a completely ridicules excuse for Maxwell to still be at home. So his relationship with his parents won't suffer? Ezekiel lives on his own and his relationship is fine. They may or may not have even gone to Maxwell's game together, they're up to date on what's happening with each other, they know he's gay, and they love his boyfriend. Ezekiel's just trying to make it seem like his boyfriend isn't being a Maxie pad.

So their coach gets off on seeing boys with energy? I feel like there's a gay joke in there, I just can't find it.
Ezekiel's daily routine sounds a lot like mine.
I love how Maxwell just casually makes fun of Ezekiel's orgasm count, simultaneously bragging about how good he is for giving him such a high number.
"you grab the lube.” You should have seen the looks I was going you.
I love the mention of happy trails! I don't know why, but yes!
I just realized how snooty an stuck up Ezekiel and Maxwell's names sound together. Like they should both just walk around in suits. Fuck walking, they should drive their red Mercedes in their Calvin Klien underwear and suits(or just underwear, whatever) on the way to their mansion in the Bahamas.
Shower sex is dangerous. Duly noted.
I also love dirty talk and desperation and whining! Grah! I FUCKING CAN'T IT'S NOT FAIR IT'S LIKE YOU KNEW. But I'm against the decision to not use lube. I feel like it is always needed. Also, I'm not sure how I feel on he usage of the world impale...
Why are they taking a cold shower? I, uh, don't think you can cup a dick. Balls, yeah. Dick, no. Honestly, I think this whole scene would have been much better as a narrative, not to say it wasn't good. I think rather than saying something like "he pressed his back against mine" as first person it would be better to say something like "he presses his back against the chest of his lover" as a narrative or "I could feel the warmth of his skin press against me, his shoulder blades kneading my chest" as first person. I think that would show that the person is more into it because at times it seemed like he wasn't and was breaking down each movement to put in a timeline later rather than enjoying himself or Ezekiel's reactions.
Washing each other! It's too cute! But, damn I just realized that Lou uses that shower too. That must be fun to think about when she's taking a bath; how many ghosts of orgasms are splattered on the wall. Or maybe she's into that. Who knows.
Also, I did not see any mention of a baby. You have failed me.

So uh I read this chapter like 4 times....
It was incredibly hot.

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Closet genius is Gatlin's body... Yeah, okay.
I like the way Ezekiel and Floyd interact. It seems like one of those friendships where neither judges the other, even or stupid things, and they could be separated for months and then come back to each other like it'd been a day.
I feel like Carillo is a bit too.... Friendly with his students. Like, teachers or professors or whatever shouldn't be telling of their LSD trips. Or they should. I don't know. Also, I imagine him looking like Anderson Cooper.
"It might find you" So cheesy, I can't even.
I have to tell ya, the lamp was not as well hidden as the monkey.
Way to somehow work Maxxie into there though.
*coughcough*you won't remember shout outs*coughcough*

Maxxie Pad lets his dad run his life and I frown upon this fact. But I laugh upon. The fact that his dad thought him and Minnie were fucking.
It's like Ezekiel already is in the you-shit-while-I-shower stage. He just jumped into the conversation and ends it all on his own.
I feel like if I was a boy I'd be just like Maxxie; thinking sleep when you're in someone's bed.
I love seeing people in uncomfortable situations, but not necessarily embarrassing, and I think that's the reason I love Ezekiel's seizure moments. But I feel like a bad person for it. Oh well. I'm not Jesus.
I don't know why, but I live when people lovingly insult their significant other. It's probably my favorite thing anyone could ever do in a relationship.

HEHEHE

I love it :)
That new medicine sucks dick >.>

I feel like Ezekiel has had is nose is multiple places where it didn't belong. He's just not man enough to admit it.
I like how he's just like "Oh fuck, don't take the food. Anything but the food."
I feel like Ezekiel probably has more civilized conversations with his dog than he does anyone else.
If I was Maxxie I'd be on guard. This whole borderline intimate relationship with a razor mirrors Sweeny Todd, and we all know what happened to his wide an Ms.Loveit.
Hostess was bought by a Mexican pastry company named Bimbo. Twinkies are Bimbo's and do not have time to mess with other Bimbos, hence why they are not talking to Ezekiel.
I like the fact the the receptionist is a boy and the doctor is girl.
Hey. Why isn't he taking Maxxie? He should be taking Maxxie. Maxxie need to be with him. And I don't only say this in hopes of drunk sex.

Aw man. I feel like shit is gonna go down in the next chapter.
Shit just got real 0.0

So I commented. On chapter six. On every paragraph of chapter six.
Every. Paragraph.

I feel like if skipping a date would cause everything to crumble then you need o work in the strength of your relationship.

Aw, they take turns. It shows how they don't give a shit about that usual I-wear-pants-you-wear-my-cum roles. Also, their waitress Gould have been ready with a bone and bowl of water for Kallen since its a usual restaurant. Service these days.

I'm still pissed he hasn't told his parents. Maybe this is why they have a week relationship: they don't even mean enough to each other for them to let the important people know of them.
Or Maxxie's a pussy.

How the hell does the flower shop lady know and not his parents? They must not have made too big of an impression if his orients haven't caught in yet. Or his parents are as stupid as he is scared.

STOP KILLING YOUR CHARACTERS! YOU'RE NOT EVEN HALFWAY THROUGH THIS FUCKING STORY!

Way to work a genuine complement into the date. (If you don't get this reference than I hate you)

DO HE GOT A BOOTY?
HE DOOOOO.

I always forget Kallen isn't brown. It's so confusing.
*coughcough*wearing a fucking vest*coughcough*

You know, the one who puts their arm through the loop is usually the girl.

I feel like if Kallen does this every week his center consul would be scratched to high hell.

Where do they get all this money from? Aren't college kids broke?

I like how people are looking their eyes because of the dog, not the fact that they're two guys.

I want Zeke to take Maxxie's advice and then come up with a masterpiece. Museums man.

Why is he even looking around? Shouldn't he be looking into the eyes of the man he loves? Does he not get romance?

Obviously, some men's interests do extend past their dinner plates.

I CAN SEE HIM SLOWLY DYING INSIDE. I CAN SMELL IT TOO.

If he really want to stop fighting about it then stop talking about it. Dipshit.

PUT OF HIS DEAD AND DYING LINGS!

The suicide or staring?

I feel like they've been dating long enough to render this conversation unnecessary. Maxxie needs to get over his whole "I want to protected you" thing when it comes to things he can't control.

Sweet, but stupid. Why is he so stupid and scared? Isn't stupidity suppose to make you braver?

You love a moron. But I see why he appeals to you.

Maxxie, I think he's trying to tell you something. Like, penis. He wants it. He wants you to have the booty. He wants the booty to make you moan. He's envious of the steak.

Cook? Don't college students just east a crap load of ramen?

I bet his sausages are delicious.

I don't see why he's so opposed to the idea.

I feel like Lou is their mouthed figure. Like, if they ever want a kid she will be the one who's womb it will reside in.

Ramen. Lots and lots of ramen.

Walking distance? Just have Maxxie give him piggyback rides all over town.

They can just take the studio and push it someplace else (REFERANCESSSSSSS)

Why did he change the subject so quickly? I guess it could be because he things it's a more pressing matter, but they should take care of one problem at a time. And it also makes it seem like either Zeke doesn't care too much about the studio or he doesn't like the idea of giving it up.

How many opportunities like that are there really? Plus, Maxxie can just pack him away in his suitcase.

PUSH IT SOMEWHERE ELSE!

Sweet. The sweetness negates the pussyness.

He is legal after all(I think), he can make his own decisions.

Maxxie on the other hand should not be in charge if making his own decisions. After graduation is probably the worst time to decide that. Know why? You'll be out of time you dipshit.

He probably had a smart idea, unlike Maxxie. But the beech is so romantic! Oooolala! *air humping*

......Kallen's a girl?

Well, it's already one, he mind as well. I mean, why not just make the night?

He knows he wants to be nudging those pants down.

Not if you keep leaving to go home! You'll be in a knot! A a knot of tissues and sexual frustration!

I still love you <3
And I still very much love this story!

It would help my comment making if I knew how old Jules was. Just putting that out there.
For some reason, I don't really like their brother sister relationship at all. I don't know why, I guess....... It doesn't seem close or realistic enough? Though I don't think that's really it. I don't know, it's just a giant meh for/to me.
But, uh, yay for sleeping in big T-shirts and undies!

-4-

Things that make Maxxie gay(and why) and me offensive:
- “Six is just rude.” -Only gay guys complain ably things being rude(that YouTube guy Tyrone hates makes me think this)
- “Oliver is a very attractive guy” -Only gay guys notice things other than asses, no where here did he mention Oliver’s ass.
- “We really are like a family” -Straight men don’t like to acknowledged the fact that they have families. And gay guys can’t have families because of the lack of vagina and retarded olds white guys that don’t want to let them adopt.
- “When I get out of my car I notice my neighbor out checking the mail” -Only gay guys notice things. Their girlfriend could dye her hair atomic pink and a straight guy would not notice.(“Most men’s awareness does not extend past their dinner plates” -Count Volger(Scott Westerfeild- Leviathan))
- “yeah, I’ll go” - Only gay guys would willingly go to a theatre and are confident that they will remember a prior commitment in the future.
- “I watch the game between Spain and Portugal” -Guys from places that speak Spanish or something close to it are gay.
- “Life is good” -A straight man would find something wrong with life and be in the garage trying to fit it, not sitting on a couch watching sweaty men chasing around a ball.

Things that make me love Nicole(and why):
- Sweeney theater -Sweeney Todd, man. Sweeney Todd.
- Fair To Midland -Their last two albums kicked ass, they’re fucking unbelievable live, and Andrew Darroh Sudderth. Why is he amazing?
And that's only a fraction of the reason why.

Yay cuteness

Lol I like his parents :p too funny. Can't wait for more!

Aw, that's too sweet! He shoved right back, like "fuck no you independent stubborn boy. I'm helping you through this whether you want it or not, so he used to it because I love the fucking hair out of you you moron." Only, you know, nicer. I make is sound crude because I'd I think about it in any other way il coo and wake he whole house up.
I love how cool and composed Minnie is. She doesn't freak out and run on sight, she just kinda sits there chill and concerned .i know she's probably used to it, but I just love how conditioned she is to it. Same with Maxxie, only Maxxie just jumps back up in the bitch horse and goes back to bantering with Zeke. Love. So much love.

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AT LEAST SOMONE SHARES MY HATRED OF ZEKE'S SMOKING. God, how can you just sit there and kill your character. Heartless jerk.
Hey, everyone's a little gay inside. There is no so straight there is no possibility to be gay. Maxxie's parents are insane. How did Maxxie's parents even think he was straight? I mean, noticing hilights? Come on. He mind as well be shitting rainbows.
Homo-telepathy obviously isn't strong enough to overcome the power of baths. They just was away all of the homo-waves.
"But I'm just saying that we could be sitting on the couch naked tonight." I love Maxxie. That's all.
Maxxie is Zeke's bitch. I guess we all know who's the man in this relationship: Maxxie.

Love, love, love this! The characters are so enthralling and I adore the kind of relationship they have going on, it makes me laugh and smile and blush no matter how silly that is of me. I specially liked the way Zeke described the seizure; it felt real, not exaggerated like I initially thought it would be. I can't wait to see the plot evolve, seriously. You are a terrific writer and this is an amazing story! Can't wait for more :D

I love this already, it's written really well and the characters are fantastic and I like how cheeky they are to one another. There's not many stories on here that can make me love them from the first chapter, but this definitely did.
I really can't wait to see where you go with this, I didn't ever want to stop reading (though it was probably good there was only three chapters since i'm supposed to be getting ready for work).

i dont know why this doesnt have more comments.... :/
I love this so far! can't wait for more so update soon please :)