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  • strychnine.

    strychnine. (150)

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    Okay. It is really quite difficult for me to put into words how MIND-BLOWINGLY FANTASTIC I thought this was. The way you use words is nothing short of miraculous. You described it perfectly-

    Adam leans over and presses a kiss to Shane’s cheek, and it’s sorry in all the ways it’s I love you.

    That line is perfection. Sheer perfection.

    The part I thought was best about this though was your characters. They were fully realized and unique, and their personalities affected te story, and not vice versa. That is (in my opinion) extremely difficult, so kudos to you, on this entire piece!
    January 1st, 2013 at 08:25pm
  • Elephant PJs

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    I still can't believe you used that picture tehe
    And you went from 60 to 1000 words in one night. I'M SO PROUD OF YOU Clap

    It's so angsty. And I actually really dislike Adam, as a person. I mean the character depth is really well developed I think; hinted at with little phrases like You're supposed to yell at me. Just yeah. Very, very angsty and somewhat unsatisfying just because it feels like such a desperate-cling onto a hollow relationship with two people who probably shouldn't be together, even if they love each other.

    But I liked it. It's somehow quite a different tone for you. Somehow.
    December 31st, 2012 at 05:50am
  • Saul Hudson

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    First of all I love the layout, it's really neutral and has kinda a soft tone which fits in with the story. I also love the title I think it almost has an ring to it. I love the characters you've created you did a fantastic job with fleshing them out

    Adam leans over and presses a kiss to Shane’s cheek, and it’s sorry in all the ways it’s I love you.

    The line above i have a bit of a problem with it comes off as a bit of a fragment like there should be another word in there or something.

    It's a very pretty story with the words you've used despite that it's between broken people but I adore it. The emotions you've put in are incredible and I really enjoyed it :)
    December 30th, 2012 at 10:28pm
  • What...

    What... (1400)

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    THIS IS MORE THAN A THOUSAND WORDS. Clap Clap Clap

    I really fucking love you, but it's hard. So pretty bb. So...Cry PRETTY. And then they have broken people sex. Cry THEY LOVE EACH OTHER BUT IT'S SO HARD. Cry You... Cry MAKE ME SAD. MAKE ME ALL KINDS OF SAD. EVERY KIND.
    December 30th, 2012 at 08:31pm