January 1st, 2013 at 08:25pm
I still can't believe you used that picture
And you went from 60 to 1000 words in one night. I'M SO PROUD OF YOU
It's so angsty. And I actually really dislike Adam, as a person. I mean the character depth is really well developed I think; hinted at with little phrases like You're supposed to yell at me. Just yeah. Very, very angsty and somewhat unsatisfying just because it feels like such a desperate-cling onto a hollow relationship with two people who probably shouldn't be together, even if they love each other.
But I liked it. It's somehow quite a different tone for you. Somehow.
Adam leans over and presses a kiss to Shane’s cheek, and it’s sorry in all the ways it’s I love you.
That line is perfection. Sheer perfection.
The part I thought was best about this though was your characters. They were fully realized and unique, and their personalities affected te story, and not vice versa. That is (in my opinion) extremely difficult, so kudos to you, on this entire piece!