Hi there. I really enjoyed reading the first chapter to your story. It's off to a great start and I can't wait to see what you do next. I really love this particular line: Does he think I am going to make a deal with the local mafia when I can barely even ask the price at the local flee market? It reminds me so much of myself; I'm terrified of speaking in public places such as supermarkets, restaurants, movie theaters and such. I could really relate to this chick. You should think about adding a custom layout to this story. It would make it even more appealing! Good luck with writing and congrats on the new story! :D