Hmm, pretty good. I think that it might be a bit better if it wasn't in first person, but you do get to learn more from her perspective. Why'd you start from third year? Its a great concept but.. I dunno.. I did really like the anon P.O.V. It was rather nice. Keep writing, I want to see how this goes!
I hope anon is Draco. c: But I had a good chuckle at Snape during the scene with Lily and Harry, because it's exactly what he would say in the real books. Good job!
Awesome chapter! But I would've thought Malfoy would try to be friends with at least one of the Potters (Lily) not be a bully but I guess that's his personality.
I like it. I was a bit confused about the whole Harry being in his third year and then lily getting sorted but I got it now. This is really cool, and if you really want some help writing it, we could talk and ill see what I can do. I'm just really busy as well so it might not work out. Anyways, get job love! It's great. xxx