Triangles - Comments

Hi! I'm here from comment swap, and for a first story, I think it's awesome and I love the layout too. Echo is an awersome character and I love that your story shows light on the subject of mental disorders and I completley love Echo! I'd love to see longer characters, so we can explore the charcters more than you have already explained (the descriptions of the charcters arealready awesome by the way!) Keep it up, loving the story :D

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So first of all I just wanted to say wow. This is just so good! I didn't know this was a fan fic and was sure I wouldnt connect to it but from the first chapter I just couldnt stop reading. I love stories about mental disorders (as weird as that sounds) and I really connected with echo (which is a epic name btw). I loved seeing her start to open up. The only thing I'd like to suggest is that you make the chapters longer. Keep up the great work!

Hi! I'm here from comment swap. This is super awesome especially fir a first story! I would have no idea it was your first story had it not been on your description. Your summary is really long and great and really drew me in. It's an exciting and super original story, keep it up

woowowowowowowowowo this is such an original idea who knew anyone could write this good. I didididididididididid not bc not even i can and I find it fantastic that you could. The summary is n really long and really nice. I can't wait to rad more and i find it awesome that you can have such an awesome book cause it is awesome btw i"m new

@ robynaliciawestwood
Thank you ^.^ There is some sort of layout, just coloured writing and things. If I was gonna add pictures of charecters it'd have to be in the charecter section which I've never really considered becasue they're not OC's, but it's a good idea :) x

I like your story, I really do! One thing I would change (even if it’s slightly complicated to do) is add a layout; it doesn’t have to be the best that has ever been created, it could just be a simple background with a picture of Gavin so people know who they are seeing, although it was a good read for me. I thoroughly enjoyed it and cannot wait for more! :)

I am here because of comment swap. I really liked your story but you have to change the summary. It should be a summary, like what you would write on the back if this became a book. Not what's in the first chapter. Also the first chapter being labeled "Chapter 1." Was a major turn off for me at first. The final thing is you should apply a layout so this doesn't look so simplistic and it'll make it look as If you care more.

@ XXXataktoulaXXX
Thank you!!! The reason the summary and the first chapter are the same is cause I got really confused when starting this and never got round to editing it :/ thanks for reminding me bout it though ^.^

Dear author, I honestly like this a lot, no kidding. The only thing you have to change is the summary, what you have written there is the same with the half of the first chapter. Just change the summary because the first chapter is great as it is. Other than that, your story is great and it has lots of potential. Keep up the great work. ~Marian.

Dear author, I honestly like this a lot, no kidding. The only thing you have to change is the summary, what you have written there is the same with the half of the first chapter. Just change the summary because the first chapter is great as it is. Other than that, your story is great and it has lots of potential. Keep up the great work. ~Marian.

I absolutely love this. Echo clearly wants someone to do what Sean is doing, opening her up and being there. It's like she has a hard protective covering and she just wants someone to crack it open. The fact that Sean seems like the most adorable person every helps too haha. Lovely character development, even though it's only on chapter 3.

Wow you did an awesome job with this story. I applaud you for writing a fanfic. Many people shy away from them because it puts some restraint on how far the writer can twist the truth. I personally love reading them even if I do not know the characters in real life. You do a wonderful job describing your characters both their physical and personality traits. I was really impressed with the way you wrote Echo's personality. It was very raw and unusual. Most people would have difficulty writing a character like that, but I think you did a fantastic job with it. I also loved the way this third chapter ended. I do not know if you plan on continuing this story or not but either way it was very dramatic and emotional. My favorite part was the line where Echo said, "Do I trust him enough?" Just that one part really opened up another side of Echo. A more gentile and what would seem like a more humane side of her. On a side note I love the name Echo Moon. It is really creative as well. So again awesome job with this story. :)