I adore this story. It's just so beautiful but dark at the same time, and the last paragraph gave me chills.
The music stops, but the dancer doesn’t, continuing in her scattered pattern of turns and jumps, unable to see but determined to carry on. Her bones are full of lead, pulling her down to the unforgiving ground and tying her there.
That's such a gorgeous description. For only a little over 300 words, you've managed to inject so much description and emotion; it's lovely.
The music stops, but the dancer doesn’t, continuing in her scattered pattern of turns and jumps, unable to see but determined to carry on. Her bones are full of lead, pulling her down to the unforgiving ground and tying her there.
That's such a gorgeous description. For only a little over 300 words, you've managed to inject so much description and emotion; it's lovely.