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You have errors that repeat over and over like "your" that is supposed to be a "you're". Once you learn them, it will be fine. You have potential of someday becoming a writer who can use a variety of sentences skillfully.
Now for the content, I think you explain the concept well, and the emotions made sense. You have a lot of potential here too for writing stories well. Overall it was nice, even when it was short. It draws out some curiosity as to what exactly happened and who the speaker and her/his lover. And I like how in the author's note you encouraged constructive criticism. You'll keep getting better with that mindset. Keep writing! :D
You can look at someone and see there entire life behind they're eyes.
their*
To become something stronger then a tiny type rope that might break or you might fall off of if you take a unsure step.
I'm not sure how to correct this one because I am exactly not sure what you are trying to say. The wording confuses the reader and throws them out of the flow of the story.
But to take a chance and keep going until you reach the middle, you know you going to be fine and your not going to fall.
you know you going to be fine <--- check that over
your not
you're not* because you are trying to say "you are not"
Then when he smiles back, you know your not going home.
you're
If your in the middle of a type rope, do you choose to go towards the light, towards love?
you're
You have errors that repeat over and over like "your" that is supposed to be a "you're". Once you learn them, it will be fine. You have potential of someday becoming a writer who can use a variety of sentences skillfully.
Now for the content, I think you explain the concept well, and the emotions made sense. You have a lot of potential here too for writing stories well. Overall it was nice, even when it was short. It draws out some curiosity as to what exactly happened and who the speaker and her/his lover. And I like how in the author's note you encouraged constructive criticism. You'll keep getting better with that mindset. Keep writing! :D