Please, Don't Leave Me - Comments

love it please update xx

Hmmm I'm liking this so far. The a7x guys seem pretty cruel in it and I like that in stories lol. It's nice when they aren't all mean seeming at first then instantly tea parties and rainbows right away. I like your writing and style and I don't see anything wrong with it or any errors. Only thing I would suggest though is.....that you update quick so I can read more lololol.

I've never really read a Zacky Vengence fic before, but this is really capturing my interest. The first chapter really makes the reader wonder what's going on and the second chapter made me more curious. XD
I think your writing is nice, there seems to be a nice and smooth flow, and I think this plot has good potential! :D
Great job on this story!
Sorry for taking so long with this Sweetheart for the Valentine's Day blog. I received a ton and had a lot of college work to complete before I could start. XD

This Zacky Vengeance guy seems like a real doucher. Poor kids. I think I will subscribe!

Chapter two, just as interesting! Though I think there was a typo in this sentence, “He had a sickening smirk on my face, and I didn’t recognise him from the night before either.” I think you meant smirk on his face. And it’s recognize with a Z not an S.

Maybe another world for evil in the sentence, “If you think I’m evil, you haven’t seen anything yet.” Evil sounds more like villain. Maybe you could reuse the word bastard because that’s what she associated him as.

In the first chapter I think “bound” would fit better than tied, especially because you said shackled later on. When I think tied, I think more ropes than chains.

Just some helpful tips. It’s up to you if you want to use them or not. I’m going to read the next chapter! :)

Hey, I read your blog and decided to check out your story. I really loved the first chapter! I really want to know why her parents had her taken away! And who are these huge guys, where are they taking her??? I will certainly read the next chapter!

Its interesting, I like it but I have been told also, try to put some description after the speaking. I hate to do it but it keels the readers from getting confused, though I'm so used To it that I quickly figure it out. I definetly recc. And subscribed. Also if you need any place to check grammar and spelling click here :) keep up the good work.

Very interesting, it's nice to get your character's name finally. I do like the longer length of this chapter. You're doing a very good job of keeping me intruiged though, aluding to a lot of things but not giving details just yet. Are there more people behind these doors? Why has Rose been 'bought'? Why is elijah being so nice when everyone else is not? Is it just a front. Can't wait for more.

i like this story but i wish you would bring some names into it so we don't have to figure out who she's talking to

This is getting quite dark now, genuinely worried for what might happen to your character. Can't wait to see more though, keep it up :)