Alright, I'm going to be honest with you. It's an interesting story line, but I could not get into it. It sort of sounds very...bland. It's like you're taking everything you learned from a middle school English classroom and trying to make it into a novel. There's almost too much personality, and not to mention the errors. It'd be a great story, but "uGhhhh" i couldn't deal with it. Try to edit it and I'm sure it would be amazing. I really like the theme too.
July 18th, 2014 at 06:34am