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I'm completely and utterly torn when it comes to Noah. I want to like him because I can feel the emotions Sophie has for him but he acts kind of like an ass at the same time and it makes it very difficult on me, dammit.

Anyway, oh god, I love your writing. I don't think I've read a single thing that I didn't like by you yet. You're absolutely wonderful; a complete gem. You write so wonderfully and I look forward to more quite eagerly.

your layout is so lovely and simple and pretty; i just love it.

i also love how you started the first chapter with how Noah took her lip virginity and how they've grown up to still be awesome friends. I also get a country-type feel when reading this story. I don't know if that's your intent, but I definitely like it :). And I love Noah and Sophie's relationship and how its so full of love and it's effortless. I also love how you describe things. You're truly a great writer! I'm afraid the drugs are going to get the boys in trouble though, and im curious to see if Sophie goes into them or not. I, myself, have a bit of a crush on Noah and would love to get to know him and Sophie more as the story goes on.

You have yourself a new subscriber :D!

I'm determined to make sure all of your stories get more recognition. Because there hasn't been a damn one that I don't like. You're marvelous.

And I really like this. Noah seems like kind of a jerk off but I can feel the feelings that Sophie has for him and I kind of like him too. I just feel so bad for Sophie.

You should definitely keep writing this one it seems great!

Hello Darkaly,

First I would like to say I'm very impressed with your writing style. You have definitely found your passion as a writer, and it shows. Over all I'm not the biggest fan of your style, but that is mainly due to my own personal preference.

I do think you capture one side of a certain group of teens quite well. I haven't been around teenagers who drink and do drugs myself, but from your story I could get a picture of how they might behave.

My only advise would be to work on your character development, right now my image of Noah is not all that pleasant and I can't understand why Soph would give herself to a guy like him. I think if I knew a bit more about Noah and also what draws Soph to him, I think that would only add to your story.

Thank you for the enjoyable read.
-Rosi