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Ok, why didn't I know that this was updated! D:

Agh! Elaine felt like how I felt with the stomach virus (when i get the stomach virus, I get it real bad and my stomach hurts a lot), but wow! I'm glad she recovered from the appendicitis. I almost thought she was pregnant for a second there. Anywho, I can't wait read more. I hope you feel better as well. <3

Summary: Just looking at the banner I knew it was a Outsider fanfic. Which really got me excited since I have seen the movie (and should read the book) and utterly just adored it. To the actual summary itself, it's very interesting. It's like one of those plots you would see in a movie but it's in story form. Which is awesome.

I may be wrong, but I think when you say teenage Nala it should be teenager.

Chapter One: I like how you started with an introduction of the character, it isn't really used much now a days since some writers fear it might disinterest the readers, but for this story it works.

It’s a Saturday afternoon. the sentence seems a bit off since the chapter is in past tense, and that it present.

felt too... Plain. lower case p in plain.

Other than that it's really good. I like it. I even like how it kinda breaks the third wall between the narrative and the reader to have that feel Nala talking directly to you. :) This is a very good story, reccing and subbing.

Ok, I have to say, I love this whole story. I don't like Dallas took advantage of Elaine when she was drunk, but this whole story overall, it's a beautiful one. It makes me think that this whole story is actually apart of The Outsiders universe (I mean the world of it) - like this could easily be sort of a prequel to the book and movie or something! That's how good it is!

Now you got me thinking of my own Outsiders story.

I love Elaine. She has a lot of spunk and it's bad what happened to her and how her dad treats her.

Now it's time for me to wait for more lovely updates from you and of course, I'm going to look up the book so I can put my own ideas together.

You did a wonderful job on this story. Carry on with the nice work. :)

never herd The outsiders, nice story. Elaine is highly defensive, though when comes to Dallas, rightfully so, the guy likes to verbally abuse her.

Worse part is she asks someone to help make sure Dallas doesn't try anything, but lot of good that did since he took advantage of her being drunk and not totally aware of what she was doing, while he was still aware. He basically date raped her, so she's right, he is scum. Not that his gang would care or side with her.

She's almost in as bad of position as with her father, lacking the physical abuse, she's getting emotional abuse and made to feel unwanted. She's drug off in the middle of the night by the guy she protests being with and it's her fault and the guy can do no wrong.
Worse part of Dallas is that he knows she was raped by her father and he still was willing to drag her off to screw her when she's obviously drunk and normally hates on him, so he's willing to subject her to more humiliation on top of her memories.

there is one thing though, you might not put quotes in when she's thinking, unless she's talking to herself, a few times I though she started speaking to someone, till the she thought at the end of the sentance.

And might eb just me, but the comments section cuts off the last two letters of sentences O.o All and all though great story, lot more engrossing than i thought it would and I actually read it threw instead of scanned it.

That nightmare was terrible. :( Poor Elaine.
Two-bit = lol. I wish Elaine liked Dally more.

Lol, Soda and Elaine look identical. Well of course they are related. Not.

Oh Elaine... that mouth. Oh my, the end of 16. Well, that's a great way to end that chapter!

School, yep, that sure is punishment. Can't wait for the update! Love this story.

Just to start off, I am a huge fan of The Outsiders and have been since seventh grade when we had to read it. We also watched the movie, but it was no where near as good as the actual book.

Awe, her grandmother actually reminds me of mine. When I suggested that my my grandmother move back in with me and my aunt she got irritated. >.>; Kinda wished my grandmother kept a few journals, I used to love hearing her stories so it would have been interesting to read. Onward to chapter 3, I'm loving this story by the way.

One thing that I really love is how you made the twins, normally, people write them as always together 100% of the time, complimenting personalities, same likes/dislikes, ect.

:o I can't wait to read more from the journal.

Wow, I feel so bad for Elaine :/

Glad she got out of there!

Lol, "What do I look like? I'm a girl, dammit-" reasonable assumption I say, if someone asked me that after waking up after being unconscious and all.

I opened one eyes should be singular. Chapter 9.

D'aw Ponyboy is just so sweet. Play almost dead, lol.

Oh Dally.

Awe, Johnny. I can't help but grin how he hugged Elaine and is being very truthful. Yep, I'm in love with this whole story. Yay, Dally saves the day.

Elaineee why are you starting so many fightsss?

Oh my god, he didn't. That is awful, ugh I feel so bad for Elaine. :(

I cannot wait for the next update.

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I'm heard of The Outsiders but don't have a clue on what or who they are. All in all, I don't think I had to know much about them to read the first chapter. The way you write from this first p.o.v is very interesting. I loved when she says, I couldn’t say if I liked him or not, but something about him defiantly caught my eye. I wanted to get to know him better, mother permitting. because it puts such a twist of mystery to it.

I liked reading the little dialogue between her and her mother. I think the first chapter was slow, but not boring. And just from this, I totally know that this has great potential.

I'm not a really big fan of the outsiders but I really like this story and how you change POV's, , it flows well which is really good can't wait for an update !!

I was SO happy that I came across this story, I absolutely love The Outsiders...the book and the movie!

I can't wait to read more, I have really really liked what I have read so far. :) :) you're doing great!!!

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I'm not familiar with The Outsiders and now I wanna go search 'em up on the google. So I read the first two chapter whoch I thought were both decent length. Spelling a grammar wasn't an issue that I really have to speak about. I really enjoyed this and I think your doing a good job. Keep writing its great. :)

im in the 7th grade, and our teacher made us read the book and watch then movie. And honestly I had a crush on Dallas. Now i am complete! awesome storyyyy

omg this story is really good :) Keep it up

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Oh I just love this story soo so much!! I LOVE The Outsiders and you give a great amount of details. I really enjoy all of the effort you've put into this. It's really really amazing and I absolutly LOVE it!! This is bringing back all my feeling for the greasers and socs and everything else right now! You've earned yourself anouther sub-er! Uh all the feels asdfghjkl!! :) Cant wait for more updates!!!

Hi! Comment swap brought me here and I'm glad it did :) this story is really cool and I love the alternations point of views. I'm not really a fan of the Outsiders but this story is still great! Elaine is such an amazing character

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Oh I just love this story soo so much!! I LOVE The Outsiders and you give a great amount of details. I really enjoy all of the effort you've put into this. It's really really amazing and I absolutly LOVE it!! This is bringing back all my feeling for the greasers and socs and everything else right now! You've earned yourself anouther sub-er! Uh all the feels asdfghjkl!! :) Cant wait for more updates!!!

Wow, I really like this story! :D *subscribed*
I've never read or watched the Outsiders, so I don't really know much about the characters or anything, but I already love them! Especially Elaine. She's feisty. xD
I'm excited for you too keep writing this!! As ironi1234 said, I'm also curious as to where you will go with the story and it has a lot of potential. :) Can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^

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Wow this is reallly good! To be honest I've never read or heard about the outsiders. I didn't know this was a fan fic until after I finished reading this. I love the way you wite Elaines character. I'm really curious as to where you'll go with this as it has a lot of potential. Good Luck! :)

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Wow this is reallly good! To be honest I've never read or heard about the outsiders. I didn't know this was a fan fic until after I finished reading this. I love the way you wite Elaines character. I'm really curious as to where you'll go with this as it has a lot of potential. Good Luck! :)

This story has to be hands down the best written Outsiders fanfiction I've ever read. And I've read a lot.
The plot is something completely new and I love how the two stories kind of mirror each other in some ways.
I already feel really attached and invested in the characters, which was great.
Every once in a while I stumbled upon a very minor spelling error, but besides that this story is flawless.
I can't wait to read more of this! *Subscribed*