Endeavor - Comments

CS - First, your summary was clear and concise, so good work on that. I've only read the first chapter so far, but as of yet I can't detect any grammatical errors. However, toward the end you suddenly switch from first person to third person and then back to first person. Also, I think maybe you could have been clearer in the beginning, maybe elaborate on Cam's conversation with the counselor before she asks if he's listening. We can see he's upset, but we don't really know why. But otherwise it's pretty unique and well-written. Good job!

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Comment swap-- I really like this! Very unique, I don't think I've read anything quite like this in all my years on Mibba. Details are done well without crowding the story with too much time describe things. You didn't draw out the beginning of the story, which is annoying, you jumped right in without making it too hasty. I love your writing style, you know how to write and that's refreshing after reading some of the stories on here. You're doing a great job, keep up the great work! Looking forward to reading moooree~ [Recommended + subscribed]
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CS - Wow, this is really interesting and intriguing story! I like how you put around the little details giving pretty and nice picture to imagine. And the start is so good too. It is rare that the start of the story makes to read more. It throws you right into the action and you can't stop till you read it through.
Sorry, not a fan of werewolves. But I'll definitely recommend it to anyone who is into that stuff.
Keep writing and make your updates more frequent.

Comment swap - I'm not one for things with werewolves and the like, but christ is this awesome. I really wasn't expecting how much I enjoyed only two chapters (The Grease reference definitely won me over as a skeptic) but I did and I have to commend you on using a genre that's very popular right now and avoiding cliche using the Alpha-beta dynamics. Camden is a really well developed character so far and Austin is hilarious. Amazing job, please write more.

P.S. I have to wonder, will more werewolf lore come into play?

This sounds really good, it's an ace idea.
It's very well written as well, can't wait for more :)
Keep it up!

This story seems interesting and even though the idea seems similar to harry potter or the hunger games, its truly unique~ can't wait for the next chapter :)
oh and i can't wait for more chapters with hunter in them.

This is really good!
I can't wait to read more. :D

I really like this idea! kinda reminds me of Harry Potter except instead of a cup you get a mate :) Hope you update soon! This seems really interesting!!!