For The Sake Of Our Country. - Comments

@ deck of cards
oh my god, thank you so much, i will definetely think about writing more like that, i am going to continue but it hard bc of the breakup and i have a new laptop so i need to get what ive already wrote onto this one and then finish it but thank you so much for the comment:')

I definitely liked it, you should really continue it. The only criticism I can give really isn't much, I just feel like you can space out some of the sentences so you can give them more of an impact, especially in the fight scene. Some times when there's a solid block of text, it feels like you just slide right through it, spacing between them will let the reader soak it in and be like 'wow that was sick' haha. One last thing I'd like to know, that I'm sure you've already planned to add in your next chapter is, where does this take place? I assume it's Italy because of the nickname 'Capo'. So it was a dream huh? Well if that's the case, this is like the definition of an 'Original Fiction' lol. Congrats on coming up with your own idea, most people on this site don't do that.:)