A Different Kind of Love - Comments

Thanks, glad you like, if you haven't seen the original The Lost Boys (1987) and ever feel like seeing a vamp story, I strongly suggest taking a look.

this started as a one shot gag, but I had been poked to turn it into a story.

I had been going back over trying to catch where errors, like one other pointed out I do tend to switch past/ present tense. Though I'll have to check the conversations, I normally space between convos, but I did write some at points where i was tired so >.< lol.

I do have a sequel, but it's mostly carried on another fic site, I've decided to switch to first person since it's easier to keep from causing confusion than with the third person pov. I've been trying to catch the little errors with the second, I missed with this first one.

I do a lot of RP so I tend to do that in third person pov. It doesn't seem as good for writing. many thanks, glad you enjoyed.

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first of all, i'd just like to say congratulations for completing this story! i know how hard it can be to remain focused and get to the end (or rather, a cliff hanger with the option to write a sequel!) so well done!

i'm not a huge fan of vampire stories, i have to admit, but you have a unique story line and i actually enjoyed reading it. i must admit that i'm not familiar with the characters in the story, having never seen the lost boys, but in a way that helped me to appreciate your writing as i had to depend solely on you to describe and create these characters for me. there were definite characteristics and personality traits that stood out to me which sometimes isn't seen in fanfiction, so kudos to you! the plot was interesting, definitely not what i expected to to be after seeing that this was a vampire fanfiction, and i think if you're really keen to do a sequel, you should because if you enjoyed writing this, why not keep writing?

i only had a few minors problems with formatting, where conversations were bunched up together making it hard to read and decipher who was saying what, but other than that i think this is quite a neat story, so well done!

summery shorten again, took out a part, hope that works, not to long, not to short. Will go threw and try and catch the switching past/ present tense and fix >.< though forgive me what I miss ( I need a beta >.< I suck with writing.)

First off: congrats for posting your first story on Mibba! That's a very brave thing to do. From there I'll go on to say that you've got a pretty neat idea on your hands. Comment Swap brought me here so I'm not quite sure who the main characters are in real life but I think I was able to enjoy it nonetheless, because this is a pretty unique plot and could work as an original as well.

As for the writing; it's good! I think you've got talent. I love reading stories with a bit of humour in them -- too many stories nowadays are just drama drama drama! But as for some constructive criticism, I'd try shortening the summary and checking for tense changes. You move from present tense to past tense every now and then and I reckon that if you just read over it you'd be able to pick up on it. Otherwise... well done and good luck with your story!

Thanks. I'll try lightening the red, see how that goes. Yea long summery I may shorten it some >.<

I use spell checkers double time, though still hit an error here and there.

Ok changed it up a little and shorten the summery, hopefully that works now. :}

Wooo chit, finally figured this stuff out, found cool pic. Hope the colour schemes alright ^.^ Comments to let me know whatcha think. ^.^

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So far, so good! I like the idea you have for this story. My only complaint is the layout, the red font makes it hard to read so I had to squint. I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes. Your summary was a bit long, but it intrigued me. Good job though!