Little Place - Comments

This was both cute and heartbreaking at the same time. I love the way you wrote it, too. It very simple and easy to comprehend, but it leaves a very big impact upon the reader (or at least that's how I feel). I think that a lot of people are like this and it's nice to see kind of two different sides of it. One person who's hanging onto the memories and one who's moving on. I think this is great and it deserves a lot more reads so I'll be recc'ing it. Great job on this!

Let me tell you something, I love how simple this story is and I like the style of it. I love when I can read a story in second person that is well-written because when somebody does write in second person, it is easy to relate to and really nice to read. As a reader, we can put ourselves in that little place.

I like when people take a little memory or a place (as you did) and describe it with such emotion power. I like the little examples that people would overlook but seem important like how he accidentally spilled soy on her shirt or they fought but wanted to make love so quickly.

This was really bittersweet and I really loved it. However it was a little distracting that the text wasn't centered enough. That's just my mild OCD talking so ignore me when I say that.

Good job!

This is beautiful!! It's beautifully sad! You're writing is very good and I genuinely enjoyed this!

This was so adorably sad, I loved it. I really like stories like this, that describe a moment in time or a place that has significance to certain people. You described a little Chinese restaurant that people would just walk past and not notice so perfectly.

I almost thought it would be a happy little story until you go to the part where you said he takes him new girl there, and that just made me sad. He seems so distraught over this girl that ran away and he's trying to hide it but it's not working, and it was so bittersweet to read.

I really enjoyed this though; your writing style fits perfectly with this type of little drabble. Lovely job!

Giveaway prize! Absolutely amazing! This is genuinely some of the most interest writing I've ever read. I was so desperate for them to work out and the line, "and it's why he takes his new girl somewhere else" broke my heart. In such a short amount of words you've managed to create believable characters - in a believable situation - who you find yourself rooting for. Only one thing I would suggest, and that' "living in different night and days to him", rather than "than him." So surprised by the little amount of love this has. It's earned a free place on my recc blog prize.