Comment swap here :) I felt bad when Carlie burned herself, that was so sad and also must have hurt like hell. Self harm is such a sensitive subject to cover. I would hate to see a therapist, especially at £50 a pop :O Not sure if the story is being updated any more but I am curious to know what happens next :)
I love how you pointed out the stubborn factor; every couple has that one thing (or more) that they simply cannot change, and it drives their significant other crazy (I myself am guilty, haha). Can't wait for the drama... Bring it! ;)
oh gosh, i really do love this. it's like one of those guilty pleasures stories, i feel, cause i hate stories where oli's a cock cause it makes me so sad cause i'm like, "oh no, oliii. *reaches hands out for a hug* oli, i love you, you're a beautiful man. don't gooo, i can't do this on my ownnn." but this story.. oh, this story. this story's like, "oh no, oliii. *reaches hands out for a hug* no wait. you are kind of a prick. go away." AND I FEEL SO GUILTY FOR THAT hahahaha this is beautiful, though. please update soon, as well as the walking boy!
I was so excited when I saw the updates for this :D I love this story so much. You really capture a lot of emotion in your stories, and I think the audience can really feel a sense relation to it. I know I do.
I love the way you write this! It's really interesting, and I can't wait to see where you go from here! :) I don't know how I feel about Oli at this point, honestly, since it seems like he's kinda playing everyone at the moment, but I can't wait to see how their relationship expands in the future :)
(~Comment Swap~) Alright, so I'll start off by saying that I'm officially in love with Oliver Skyes now. I love a guy with tattoos and I haven't seen him until I read this story so THANK YOU! But now to the story. I have to say that I absolutely love the whole diary/journal vibe of it. It's different than how stories are usually written, and it's a really great way to see how the main character is feeling. I was honestly pretty confused about the break up at first, but now that I finally figured out what happened, Oli can go to hell. (Not really, he's so attractive) I really like this story all together though. You're doing great, keep writing :)
{Comment Swap} Well this is an interesting one! It's really interesting to see a story put forward like this and to be done so well is also a bonus. You've really got the right feel for it to be a diary entry. It's great. :) Also, your description of a her feelings is brilliant; the way the emotions are so twisted and confused after a break up and how we can't help but torture ourselves over it. One question though, where is this set? I know this says Sheffield and I assume it's in the UK but you used the word mall and that feels really out of place if used in a British context especially if you're then using 'bird' as a way of describing all the gals that Oli is getting with. Does that make sense? I guess I'm just saying be consistent with your '-isms'.
I think I'll sub to see where this is going but I'd definitely like to see some more interaction in the chapters to bring in some more character development. Good job! X