I really enjoyed reading this. While I agree it was not the most creative title ever, it served its purpose and certainly got the point across. I like the length; I felt it suited the childish point of view. It was refreshing to read something that wasn’t from the eyes of a teenage girl, and the small details made the setting very easy to visualize. Your characters expressed emotion the way I would expect a child in that situation would, which I think is difficult to achieve sometimes. Taking into account that this was a piece written outside your comfort zone, I think you did a very good job with it and you could do great things if you decide to write more along the same vein.
April 5th, 2013 at 06:48am